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'social perception development' children learn how to be good members of society



letho7990 3 / 4  
Oct 4, 2011   #1
Topic : Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society . Others , however believed that school is the place to learn this .

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

Children's education plays a considerable role which helps our child to develop not only mental ability , but also social perception . There are some ideas about this , a number of people think parents should take responsibility to teach their child , whereas others believe school is more advantage than parents. This essay will be analyzing arguments below by several points as follow .

To begin with , the influencing on parents to their son which is stable upbringing is vital role to improve children's ability . In fact , with a large number of experiences that parents are received in society which makes them easier when they provide their son advice . For example ,by teaching son the positive and also negative of playing game , parents will preclude various mistakes that children can make . Thus , it is significant errors , if separate the parent's responsibility for teaching their son to be good person.

On the other hand , school is a good place for pupil to develop critical skills such as physical ability and social problem solving. For instance, they can acquire positive relationship with friends , teachers and also a range of academic and non-academic subjects. At a result , with numerous advantages of taking school for pupils learning ,we contribute to children an array of major factors to grow up .

In conclusion , after analyzing the benefits of teaching pupils by parents and school . It is clear that both of them are an essential factor to make son a positive member of our society . It is expected that we can present balanced teaching system for our son in the future .

P/s : i hope someone can hepl me to check this essay , could you show me which mistake that i did in this essay .

MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Oct 5, 2011   #2
Children's education which plays a considerable role nowadayswhich helps our children to develop not only mental abilityabilities but also social perceptionskills . There are some ideas about this , A number of people think parents should take the responsibilities for teaching their childkids , whereas others believe schoolsis more advantage than can support children more advantages than parents. This essay will be analyzing arguments below by several points as follow .

To begin with , the influencinginfluence from parents to their son sons and daughterswhich is stable upbringing is vital role to improve their children's abilities . In fact , withthanks to a large number ofwide variety of experiences that parents arereceivedobtained in society which makes them easier when they provide their son advicethey are more likely to give their kids apparently beneficial advice . For example ,by teaching a son the positive and also negative aspects of playing game , parents will preclude various mistakes that children can make . Thus , it is significant errors , if separate the parent's responsibility for teaching their son to be good person. (I do not understand your point here)

On the other hand , school is a good place for pupils to develop critical skills such as physical abilities and social problem solving. For instance, they can acquireestablish positive relationship with friends and teachers and also a range of academic and non-academic subjects . As a result , with numerous advantages of taking school for pupils learningstudents can acquire from schools , we contribute togive children an array of major factors to grow up .an ideal condition to grow up

In conclusion , after analyzing the benefits of teaching pupils by parents and schools , it is clear that both of them are an essential factors to maketrainchildrensonto become positive members of our society . It is expected that we can present balanced teaching system for our son children in the future .
bahareh 18 / 48  
Oct 6, 2011   #3
Hi Letho;
if your essay is kind of Compare and contrast essay, you need to find at least two subpoints to discuss.
And it is neccessary to have more details to get through this argument.(I couldn't see enough reasons for each side of argument)!
Bahar
OP letho7990 3 / 4  
Oct 8, 2011   #4
ok thanks for you help , i will try my best to solve my essay's problem .


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