As far as the prompt restatement is considered, it is not a very good representation of the original topic. That is because you have stated an opinion (It is true that...) when there was never a consideration of the truthfulness of the topic being discussed. So minus accuracy points for that. Then you restated the writing instructions rather than providing an opinion thesis statement. Additional deductions due to a lack of clear writer's opinion in the paragraph. Starting score based on the paragraph content? Failed.
The first reasoning paragraph fails to create a strong reason for the validity of the savings discussion. This should have been compared to the real life, face to face meetings that could cost money if done in say a restaurant, club, or the mall. Comparative discussion formats could be used in this instance since there is a comparative point for discussion, money and savings. The explanation is not fully threshed out for the benefit of the reader. It leaves the paragraph open to questions, thus not being a convincing presentation.
The first solution would be setting a higher price for the Internet service.
Incorrect solution. This would affect even those who work from home and require the service for things other than socialization. This is a failing solution. The solution is not focused on the proper discusison parameters. It is not a logical solution based on the situation provided. In terms of discussion acciracy and relevance, this is not an acceptable nor passing presentation.
A concluding summary needs to have at least 40 words and 2 sentences in the presentation. The paragraph does not meet that requirement. So there is no reason for that paragraph to meet with a passing score either. There is no proper summary of the main topic, causes, and solutions, as necessary for a comprehensive summary presentation.