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Will society be able to cope with the growing number of elderly people. How can it be managed?



Phuong1904 2 / -  
Jul 5, 2021   #1

aging population brings many problems



in this day and age, many developed nations have experienced a substantial increase in life expectancy which puts a heavy burden on the healthcare system as well as the government. Because of that, I firmly believe this issue is not regarded as an easy problem to handle.

It is indisputable that the middle-aged groups are more likely to be related to chronic diseases resulting in the growing usage of pharmaceutical and costly special treatments. Consequently, the government needs to allocate a large budget to the healthcare system attempting to meet the aging population's demands. However, this investment could cause shortfalls in other areas such as the economy and education. Hence, This change in the distribution of money can impact society negatively.

There is a multitude of solutions that the government should take into account. About the former, predicting the changing demographic situations in their countries and plan accordingly will be helpful speculation for all possible eventualities. Additionally, money management courses should be put forward to raise people's awareness of how important money is and how to save it properly. In this way, those who no longer earn any money could get access to basic amenities including accommodation, food, and medical care without depending on their family or the government.

All in all, the aging population has been receiving a great deal of public attention as it affects economic growth and many aspects. The government, therefore, implement promptly the above-mentioned solutions to tackle the rising number of senior citizens

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Jul 6, 2021   #2
Be aware of the required word count for the Task 2 essay. There must be at least 250 written words presented. Deductions tothe TA score will be applied for under- witten essays. There are only 248 words here. The passage is also started with a lower rather than uppercase letter as required by English grammar rules.

The first half of the prompt is not dealt within this essay. The paragraph that should respond to: "Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today?" was not addressed. There is a whole paragraph response section missing in this presentation. That missing response shall reduce the overall score due to an under-explained at low response essay presentation. Only a partial score will be provided for the response to the second question. Due to the present errors, this essay will not be given a passing consideration.
tratramcute 1 / 2  
Jul 6, 2021   #3
You either need an article with "senior" or a plural form. Revise:
Suggestion: the rising number of a senior, of the senior, of seniors"


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