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Sophisticated constructions in the city center is not merely give worth-looking for the society.



Ra_fhli 22 / 17  
Nov 5, 2015   #1
Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sophisticated constructions in the city center is not merely give worth-looking for the society. Numerous people argue that these virtually showing poor appearance toward that city, but others convince that a dozens of sacrifice building it could be make that region livelier. In this essay I will compare these issue and give my view.

With regard to, globalization literally has been escorting people to build up several monumental buildings with kinds of design. However, it is not mean that creating new establishment also replaced original form of that region. Many people believe that impressive architecture owed by one region would damage cultural character of that area. Consequently, local communities could lost their old houses as a symbol of that region. As an example, in Bali, Indonesia, the governments proscribe their society to build up structures no more than four storey because they believe that their prayer building (Pura) should be higher than others construction.

On the other hand, some people regard as remarkable building located in inner city will attract the occupant attention because of the unique appearance. Furthermore, it is also can be used as tourist's attraction because in a big city poorly beautiful place. Besides, the increasing number of modern building in one town is also symbolize of their prosperous citizen live there.

All in all, there are convincing argument both the presence of modern buildings in the central city, I would argue that cutting-edge design of building belonged to the cities, it cannot be restricted by traditionalist understanding, but it would be better if it mixed to construct the new buildings.

omarariss 1 / 2  
Nov 5, 2015   #2
Hello,
The overall essay has basic grammar and sentence structure errors. The paragraph, "With regard to" has a sentence that instead of saying, "However, it is not meant that" it should so, "However, it does not mean that". Overall, the explanations should leave no questions to be asked. The examples in the essay are effective. Look over grammar, sentence structure and when rereading the essay out loud, ask yourself if it has a full explanation.
jlee246 3 / 4  
Nov 5, 2015   #3
Overall I think that this essay is very solid. However, remember that your last sentence is the final takeaway for the reader, therefore really focus on making the last concluding sentence POP and give the reader a good last view of your essay. Besides the few grammatical errors that the other critics pointed out, I like how you justified your conclusions with evidence and logic throughout your body paragraphs. Good work!
SHanafi 120 / 357  
Nov 6, 2015   #4
Let me straightly go the point of the task responses. Your work already answer the prompt, but this is just partial. On the other hand we should fully understand what the task is required and answer it in "holistic" way.

Striking backward to your prompt
Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different from those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest . Discuss both these views and give your own opinion .

I am keen on to simplify the task, and finding its key words would be the best that I can suggest. All the green words are those the keys (please pay attention on them). Once I get the point then it is easy to break the idea in each paragraph. To more peruse, I am afraid that your answer does a miss in "give your own opinion". What can suggest you this part is a must, otherwise you are un-intended to get a sophisticated score. Wishing this helps


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