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A sophistication of technology in communication, nowadays, gives so much easiness to contact others



ashelarisa48 36 / 47  
Aug 20, 2016   #1
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Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


In this modern era, technology of communication has developed so rapidly. It makes people changing their way to communicate to others. In the past, if they wanted to convey their feeling or tought, they had to meet them directly. Furthermore, when they could not to see them because of long distance, they would write a letter to exchange the information. Then, how about now?

A sophistication of technology in communication, nowadays, gives so much easiness, even the people can communicate easily although they are in a different continent. The best one of the technology is a smartphone. They only have to connect to wi-fi or top up the balance, then by using many social media applications in a smartphone such us electronic mail, whatsapp, instagram or facebook, they can surf and explore people around the world. It makes people gain many friends from the whole world, even they can send a message just in a second!

However, we realize it gives us a low quality of the relation. In my view, it has a different sense when people communicate 'face to face' than by using social media. For instance, they do not know how their friends' expression when they are chatting on facebook. They just look on the laptop's or phone's screen to see their friend. People can also fake their feeling eventhough they write a message with some happiness emoticons. Beside that, people sometimes has ignored their mates when they are meeting up because of too busy too reply others' messages or emails. They are happier to connect to their friends in cyberspace. That is why a smartphone get an epithet "making faraway friends to be closer and close friends to be far away".

In the end, the new style of communication will not give a bad effect to human life if that is used wisely. So that we can keep our great time to make a high quality communication to our family, friend and relatives.

kwonuhy000 2 / 2  
Aug 20, 2016   #2
Over your idea is good. But I think you should add more reasons about why it benefits on 3rd paragraph. :)

I made some correction on article and spelling issues

In this modern era, the technology of communication ...

People can also fake their feeling even though they write a message ...
Besides that, people sometimes has ignored their ...
Maura_z 1 / 2  
Aug 21, 2016   #3
Hi,the whole article is good, just some spelling issues.
1... their way to communicate towith others.
2.Besides that, people sometimes has (...) because of too busy tooto reply others' messages or emails.
3.That is why a smartphone gets an epithet "making faraway ...

I hope this helps.
Ilmi_03 47 / 67  
Aug 21, 2016   #4
Hi, Ashela :)

In this modern era, the communication technology has developed so rapidly. It makes people change their way to communicate with others.
... convey their feeling or tought , they had to meet them directly. Furthermore, when they could not to see each other because of long ...
Then, how about now?
I point out that you want to compare the communication system in the past with today. However, I do not think it is a precise statement and place. Moreover, I could not find your personal opinion, as the question ask "to what extent do you agree or disagree?"
Fadhilahumar91 61 / 68  
Aug 21, 2016   #5
hiii ashelaaa...

... way to communicate tothe others

please write your thesis statement about you agree or disagree about the statement
A sophistication of technology in communication , Nowadays, sophisticated communication technology gives so much easiness,
balance, then byand using many social media ...
T hey can surf and explore ...

we realize thatit gives us a low ...


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