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IELTS; SPACE VS MALNUTRITION- Which is more important?



mhss 18 / 53  
Mar 1, 2013   #1
Please help me with the ielts PART 2 essay,
Question:
Some people said it's good to spent on space centers while others think this money should be spent on people who are starving or needy?

To what extent do you agree?

Answer:

It is true that spending on space related activities has increased, and the aim would be finding more places for the benefit of the entire man kind before being extinct from this planet due to lack of space and resources in the near future. On contrary, helping the poor in financial assistance to stop starvation is equally important as food is considered as one of the three basic requirements for human existence. Since both scenarios carry same amount of gravity, I believe that both aspects have to be addressed equally.

Winning the space is a major break through that has been achieved in the field of aeronautics contributing us in a number of ways. For instance, placing a satellite on the air has ease us with telecommunication and meteorological forecasts, space shuttles sent to the universe used for searching planets and an attention is paid to identify threats coming form the solar system. It will be achieved by highly sophisticated equipments and technology consuming a huge sum of money. Therefore, it is worthwhile spending on them due to the enormous benefit they have brought us.

When counter argument is taken in to account, it has been shown that more than 60% of the world's population is in starvation due to lack of funds. For example, African and Asian countries are affected more. Theses down trodden are suffering from malnutrition and related issues, and their lives are endangered. Under the concept of "live and let live", well off should pay more attention on these aspects and assist them financially, for the simply reason that, those who live in poor countries are also a part of the global community.

In conclusion, funding space centers and provision with financial assistance are equally important when they are taken In to account individually.

dumi 1 / 6795  
Mar 1, 2013   #2
It is true that spending on space related activities has increased, and the aim would be finding more places for the benefit of the entire man kind before beingbecoming extinct from this planet due to lack of space and resources in the near future .

well... may not be in the near future ;)

On the contrary, helping the poor inwith financial assistance to stop starvation is equally important as food is considered as one of the three basic requirements for human existence.

My suggestion;
At the same time, many people die of starvation and it is worthy to spend such money to help them escape from such terrible fates.

Since both scenarios carry same amount of gravity,I believe that both aspects have to be addressed equally.

I believe that both aspects need to be given fair consideration.
Good introduction :)
Good writing too :)
lakpash1 1 / 8  
Mar 1, 2013   #3
wow a nice start....
christyj 5 / 15  
Mar 1, 2013   #4
Hai..

good essay..
space shuttles sent to the universe...?
number of ways. For instance, placing a satellite on the air has ease us with telecommunication and meteorological forecasts, space shuttles sent to the universe used for searching planets and an attention is paid to identify threats coming form the solar system.====number of ways.Space shuttles sent to the outer orbits are used for searching planets and an attention is paid to identify threats coming form the solar system. Placing a satellite on the air has ease us with telecommunication and meteorological forecasts. For instance, the weather forecasts which are done by the help of these satellites help to save the valuable human lives of people especially, those who are seeking their livelihood in the sea.

Christy
OP mhss 18 / 53  
Mar 3, 2013   #5
Thanks Dumi.


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