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TASK 2 IELTS: You don't need special talent to become a good sportsperson or music player



lexuanhoa123 5 / 12  
May 15, 2021   #1
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.



Some individuals claim that any youngster can become a good sportsperson or music player whether they have talents or no talents. While some agree with this statement, I am, on the other hand, are against it owing to numerous reasons.

Advocates of this idea present a few persuasive arguments. They believe that by practicing a lot and put a colossal effort into playing sport or music, a child with talents or no talents can eventually be good at it. For example, many exceptional sportspeople or musicians claimed that they succeeded not because they are gifted but because they practice several hours a day. Furthermore, advocates think that becoming a good athlete or music player does not mean that that youngster has to be the best. The child can be taught to play football so he knows how to drill balls and to shoot them well but he does not necessarily have to become an international or world-renowned footballer.

On the other hand, opponents of the statement come up with some logical and realistic counter-arguments. To begin with, a child can easily give up a sport or a music lesson if he has no passion for it no matter how talented the teacher is or how much time he is forced by parents to practice. My friend, for instance, goes to piano lessons every day but she has no taste for it, and thus, she can never be a good pianist. Moreover, some untalented youngsters hate playing sports or music because they do not want to be a laughingstock before their friends. A child who sings terribly will inevitably be depressed when being forced to sing before her class.

In conclusion, although there are persuasive arguments in both views, I still strongly believe that not all children can be taught to be a good athlete or a musician.

I would really appreciate it if you read my essay and point out any mistakes that I have made. Thank you in advance.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15388  
May 16, 2021   #2
The essay does not meet the formatting requirements. The prompt requires 3 reasoning paragraphs aside from the paraphrasing and summary conclusion. Your restatement is incomplete as it reflects only 2 out of 3 points of view for discussion. That means the discussion paragraphs should properly analyze:

- The public belief that talent is born (reason provided and explained )
- The public belief that talent can be trained and honed (reason provided and explained )
- Your personal belife or support for one of the two public opinions

Your discussion totally skips one of the public beliefs in your explanation. Your personal opinion is missing. Do not skip your fully explained understanding of the topic. The format must always be met for full prompt compliance. Again, always double check the writing requirements. Writing 300+ words, but failing to meet formatting requirements that are the basis of the C&C score will result in deductions rather than increased scores.
OP lexuanhoa123 5 / 12  
May 17, 2021   #3
@Holt
Thanks a lot for your valuable feedbacks. I will rewrite my essay and correct the format of it as you have commented. Again, thanks for your time spent correcting the mistakes that I have made. I really appreciate it and hope you will have a good day.


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