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Spending life time in a changing manner. IELTS Task 2



ARIA 16 / 36  
Apr 15, 2011   #1
Hi good friends
there is a Task 2 IELTS writing, and I appreciate in advance your comment.
Aria

Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding changes. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

When it comes to the changes in life, some people like a monotone rhythm of life with the same place and people, which they see every day and years, whereas, other like a dynamic and challenging mode of living, that give them different opportunities. I found a monotone life style is boring and like most of the time to change my job, places and even hobbies. It can help in better way to get ride of a uniform of and usual life pattern and give you the chance to see and meet other place and people.

The first thing that a changeable mode of living gives you is that you leave a boring and repetitive rhythm of your daily life. It is tiring to meet the same people everyday and go to the same way to reach in your workplace, or give the same salary, either. The kind of life that you have can also influence your performance and have effect on your abilities. It is like to watch a movie times and times without adding any new pleasure or information to you.

Moreover, modifying your usual life such as changing your job or place give you the opportunity to visit more places and meet different people. Furthermore by changing your lifestyle you have a better chance to promote your material and mental states. Changing in different levels at school during our education life is a good example of changing and enjoying of our life.

In conclusion, although, some people prefer to have their life as constant as they can, I prefer to have a more dynamic and actively changeable life. it will be a chance to see different environments and challenges years and years while see more places and fabulous people, which can provide me more opportunities.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 19, 2011   #2
I was just thinking about this. In the past week, I traveled to visit 5 different places. I constantly change my environment, and I get very restless if I just stay in the town where I live...

Here are a few small ways to improve it... though it does not even need improvement. These are minor:
It is tiring to meet the same people every day and go to the same way to reach in your workplace, or give the same salary, either. The kind of life that you have can also influence your performance and have effect on your abilities. -----every day is 2 words when you use it this way. As one word, it is an adjective and must modify a noun. Also, I crossed out some unnecessary words in that other sentence.

Great thread! Thank you...


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