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Spending money just when earn it or saving them for some future plans?



yasinb1377 1 / -  
Mar 7, 2021   #1

stop spending money uselessly



Is it better to enjoy your money when you earn it or is it better to save your money for some time in the future? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

It is accepted that in a such sophisticated world, having enough money is an indispensable object in everyone's living. We will not be able to buy our essential needs unless we are confident of having money. There are many purposes to earn money such as going on a trip with friends, buying your dreamy house, etc. Although some people prefer to enjoy their money when they earn it, others prefer to save it for some time in the future. Both plans are good and each person should manage to earn money in his comfort. In my opinion, I tend to save my earning money for plans. To substantiate my points of view, the following paragraphs will represent a cursory glance at the most conspicuous reasons.

The first remarkable point to be mentioned is that life is full of unexpected accidents such as natural accidents (tornados, floods, etc.) or internal diseases (cancer, heart attack, etc.) that we cannot predict on time to get immune against them. If we don't be lucky person, the insurance will not accept to recompense for a part of the damage and we face tremendous money that we should pay off. The best decision for not confronting such disasters is saving money. Saving money may help us reduce the anxiety that is happened by unforeseen emergencies. For instance, my uncle was always living in pleasure and he would never save a penny for himself. Once, he suffered a heart attack and was sent to the hospital. He didn't have enough money to pay for this procedure but hopefully, my father lent a piece of money to be cured. He felt so embarrassed about begging his brother for assistance and after undergoing cardiac surgery, he decided to save a part of his earning money for unpleasant events.

Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that saving money doesn't allude to young people. Even teenagers make plans for buying their favorite bicycle, etc. by saving their money pockets. Also saving money not only helps us in bad situations but also learns us how to manage to spend our money. It makes us think twice when we want to buy something. To illustrate, I usually pay attention to these quotes that my father would tell me: "Be careful, you earn money like digging a mountain but never spend it like mouse escaping". It means that I have to work hard to earn money and do not spend it uselessly. He would tell this because after I gave money from my father as a pocket, I went to the cinema with my friends and spend loads of money with friends. Once I asked my father for buying PS4 and it was so expensive and my father didn't give me money because I splurge too much. I would get upset and decided to save my pocket money and made a plan for spending and a few months later, I managed to buy it.

To put it briefly, it is an appropriate idea to save money for plans. Sometimes this saved money helps us in unexpected accidents to lessen the anxiety. Also, it helps us make plans for our spending so that we never spend our money on irrelevant things. Although enjoying our earning money is profitable, we should set a limit in order not excess more. There are many details, worthy of discussing which are not mentioned above. Finally, I highly suggested that never spend your money uselessly and have a plan for it to reach your adorable expectations.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15344  
Mar 8, 2021   #2
Seeing that this is a prompt for a Task 2 essay, you will only have 40 minutes to write, edit, revise, and finalize your task discussion. Now, I understand that you can type in a manner that would shame a secretary in terms of speed, that does not equate to a properly formatted nor discussed task 2 essay. With only 40 minutes allotted, you should not be writing more than 300 words for this task. That is, if you want to focus on a higher score based on the scoring requirements, none of which consider the number of words that you can type. Rather, the cohesiveness and clarity of your discussion points matter the most when the examiner begins to score your work.

One of the major errors in your presentation is in the first paragraph. The prompt restatement. You did not simply restate the prompt as required, but you added information that is not a part of the originally presented discussion topic. The examiners dislike it very much when you add information to the restatement because that changes the original meaning of the prompt. Even if you finally get back on track to the original topic discussion, the damage has been done to the original presentation by your ill informed decision to include information that you want to state, regardless of its non-inclusion in the original presentation.

The task 2 essay does not require a research paper type of discussion nor analysis as you did in this paper. Learn to write clearly in a quick manner. That means, using no more than the 300 word allowance for writing. 5 sentences per paragraph will more than suffice in proving your comprehension and writing abilities. How else can you be judged on your ability to be able to clearly explain yourself to an ENL person right? Keep it simple. You are not writing an opinion paper for publication. You are merely proving your English writing and grammar skills.
baochau123 2 / 3  
Mar 14, 2021   #3
@yasinb1377
hi there,
"... but also learns us how ..."
i think in this sentence it better for you to use "teaches us" rather than "learns us"


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