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You have just spent a weekend at a friend's house and forgot your coat containing some belongings


jaikrishna 5 / 7 1  
Jan 13, 2017   #1
Write a letter to your friend telling him that you left the coat. Tell him what the coat looks like, where you think you left it and what was inside it. Make some suggestions about how to get it back.

i need my valuable coat back



Dear Stevens,

I reached home today after that stupendous weekend that we have spent at your home. Thank you so much for putting me up.

Unfortunately, I have left my coat at your home and didn't realize about it while leaving from your home. Do you remember the black one that I wore when we went to Multi cuisine restaurant for the lunch on Saturday? It's a memorable gift that was presented to me by my wife at wedding anniversary day. It's black in color with white buttons.

I have kept my wallet in which valuable credit cards and driving license exist. So, it's important for me to get back the coat as soon as possible. I have friend who is passing through your town on office work. He can come and collect the coat from your office location as it is nearest location for his office. Could he please collect it from there. I have given your phone number to him and please be reachable on Thursday morning to collect the coat.

Anyways, Thanks again for a wonderful weekend and look forward to see you soon.

Regards,
Jaya Krishna
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Jan 13, 2017   #2
Jaya, if you are going to make up information about the value of the coat, saying you left your wallet in it with valuable identification cards will not work. Mostly because in real life, you will never leave the house without first checking for your wallet. If you did leave the house without it, you will soon realize that you left it and return for it. Just saying that the jacket was a gift from your wife on your wedding anniversary so you have to get it back is already enough of a pivotal reason to get the jacket back. Also, in the part where you discuss the need for the person to be reachable on Thursday, do not say "to collect the coat" as that phrase entails that the person who currently has the coat will have to go and get the coat. Instead say "Please be available on Thursday so my friend can collect the coat from you." Before I forget, the English name is Steven, not Stevens. Stevens is an English last name and not the first name of a person.


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