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About sports and international intension. Patriotic emotions?



amyllei 2 / 4  
Apr 19, 2011   #1
Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


Even to a quite limited degree, I still cannot say I would like to agree with the argument: admittedly, international sports may help to let off people's patriotic enthusiasms, no one could make sure them safe; more important, as for international intensions, comparing with other factors resulting in such conflicts, it seems rather extremely hard for sports events to relieve them.

Sometimes, international sports events may build up or even strengthen a friendly relationship between a country and another. However, it is not always a truth. Under certain circumstances, higher patriotic emotions of fans from a country will provoke the others' anger. It is a common sense that history of football tells us that this game has been associated with violence since its very beginnings in 13 century England. That's why the phenomenon of Football Hooligans is so ordinary throughout the world. During the period of season of European Football Champion, a piece of news about that someone was hurt or killed because of football violence would not become an attracting news. Obviously, we cannot expect the international sporting occasions help some crazy fans send out their fever in a safe way.

There are uncountable complicated elements conducing to international contradictions, so it will be a dream to lay the hope of peace in sports events. Berlin Olympic of 1936 didn't prevent the

outbreak of World War II, the games was reduced to be Hitler's tool to cover up his aggressive ambition. On the one hand, if there's no any problem between two countries, the sports events may work as a friendship bridge; on the other hand, if the situation is on the contrary, any kind of sports campaign will not work.

In a word, we must give the popular events a proper role in the international relationship. We should think about their value adding to the peace but we shouldn't consider them as an effective solution to international tensions.

yoyofuny 3 / 5  
Apr 20, 2011   #2
Hi, here are some suggestions for you^^

1.Even to a quite limited degree, I still cannot say I would like to agree with the argument
-->may be you can simplify it. It seems a little redundancy. You can say" I still cannot agree with the argument."

2. admittedly, international sports may help to let off people's patriotic enthusiasms, However , no one could make sure them safe;

3.Sometimes, international sports events may build up or even strengthen a friendly relationship between a country and another. -->you also can use cement a relationship. It's up to you.

4.on the other hand, if the situation is on the contrary , any kind of sports campaign will not work.

or "if the situation is the opposite"
OP amyllei 2 / 4  
Apr 20, 2011   #3
Got it and cheers! Dear ku yu-fan!


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EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Apr 21, 2011   #4
That's a funny cat. Let me see what I think of this essay...

Even Albeit to a quite limited degree, I still cannot...

I think you used too many semi-colons in that first paragraph. End the sentence and start a new one! :-) Also, maybe you should add one more sentence at the end of it to make sure the reader understands the main idea/argument you are writing about.

During the period of season of European Football Champion, a piece of news I saw a news story about someone who was hurt or killed because of football violence. would not become an attracting news.

Obviously, we cannot expect the crazy fans at international sporting occasions help some to always send out their fever in a safe way.

If you say "in a word" specify the word with " " marks:
In a word, we must give the popular events a "proper" role in the international relationship. ----If you say "in a word" it has to refer to a particular word. :-)


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