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Start work Early Morning or Work till late night? IELTS


gyal 3 / 5  
Mar 20, 2013   #1
Some people are get up early in the morning and start the day's work. Others prefer to get up later in the say and work until late at night. Which do you prefer? Use specific reason and examples....

Everybody have different habit and hoppy as characteristic. So some people are very happy to get up early in the morning and very fresh up to doing work and some people are happy to sleep in the morning and doing late work at night, because of they are very hard to wake up at morning. So mean is we need work prefect and presently and comfortable for your day to day life.

So for me as I like to wake up early in the morning but I am not wake up every early morning. Sometime I wake up late and I stay late night for finished my work. When I wake up early morning I am happy to go walk with my dog. They have very fresh air as very quite as give me peace mind. On that morning I m very exciting to learn or do something. Its give me new energy to my ability. So I learn something in this morning that keeps long last in my mind. Also I want think positive and want to help for other people.

On other hand they is big advantage for me as I m satisfy what did on that day with enjoyful mood. When I finished my early and I use my time to go watch and party with friends. I want give my mind for rest and at night I used to write a diary , then I sleep at 10pm. This is my rest night and working day.

Sometime I wake up at late as I stay at late night and I want try to finished my work or I want play with my friends or watched movie at late night. It's very hard to wake up early morning, on that morning my body has no energy to do work and no attention to anything just wants sleep.

Here I what I am trying to say that we should be think about you health and best way is wake up early in the morning. Morning air very pure and quite environment to us. They Is no noise or air pollution .

JangGemini 8 / 51 12  
Mar 20, 2013   #2
I'm sorry but there are too many mistakes in this essay. You've got to ask your teacher to help you with grammar :-/ What I have fixed are not the best so I advise you to check your grammar carefully and try to understand why you made mistakes, alright? ^^ I'm sure when you understand, you can try again!

Best,
Jang Gemini
OP gyal 3 / 5  
Mar 20, 2013   #3
thank you . i will ..
mhss 18 / 53 18  
Mar 21, 2013   #4
IELTS essay to be written on a format.

Introduction
body para 1-supporting ideas
para 2-opposing ideas
conclusion
other wise you will lose marks.

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dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 24, 2013   #5
Very good editing by JangGemini!

Everybody have

... grammar mistake; Everybody has/ All have
Your essay looks too crowded. As tip, I tell everybody who takes up IETLS or TOEFL, to leave a blank between paragraphs. Your examiner would be pleased if he gets to mark essays that are presented in a more neat and tidy manner.

So for me as I like to wake up early in the morning but I am not wake up every early morning. Sometime I wake up late and I stay late night for finished my work. When I wake up early morning I am happy to go walk with my dog. They have very fresh air as very quite as give me peace mind. On that morning I m very exciting to learn or do something. Its give me new energy to my ability. So I learn something in this morning that keeps long last in my mind. Also I want think positive and want to help for other people.

Here you do not provide a valid reason as to say why you support starting early. This is the essay structure you need to follow; Introduction, 2 body paras and the conclusion.

Introduction - introduce your topic & state your opinion
Body para1; Reason for your opinion & back it with a specific example.
Body para 2 - Reason + example
Conclusion - sum up everything said above
JangGemini 8 / 51 12  
Apr 9, 2013   #6
Thanks Dumi! :D And please flick through my new essay :) I'll be so glad if you can give me your opinion and fix it thoroughly :D
aria8111 3 / 4 2  
Apr 10, 2013   #7
Sometime I wake up at late as I stay at late night and I want try to finished my work or I want play with my friends or watched movie at late night. It's very hard to wake up early morning, on that morning my body has no energy to do work and no attention to anything just wants sleep.

Sometime, I wake up at late, Because I stay at late night. I want [to] try to {for} finished {finishing} my work . I want {to} play with my friends or watched{ing} movie at late night. It's { It is } very hard to wake up early morning. In the morning my body has no energy to do work and no attention to {do} anything just wants sleep.

Here I what I am trying to say that we should be think about you health and best way is wake up early in the morning. Morning air very pure and quite environment to us. They Is no noise or air pollution

Here, Iwhat I am trying to say that we should be think about you{ our } health and { the} best way is wake{ing} up early in the morning. Morning's air { is } very pure and it has quite environment {influence } to us. They Is { there is } no noise or air pollution.

First, you must improve your knowledge in grammar . After it write more and more.


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