Writing Task 1: Statistics of people who passed their driving exam in an Asian country in four years

percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed their driving test

The present bar graph illustrates the differences between women and men who passed their driving test in an Asian country in four years, which were 1980, 1990, 2000 and 2010. In general, it is clear that higher percentage of women who passed the test than men who did in all four years.

It is apparently seen that in 1980 and 1990, both men and women who passed the exam was fewer than the number in 2000 and 2010. There was around a half of female candidates could passed the driving test in 1980. In the next 10 years, the percentage of women was not witnessed a dramatical changes which was shown in the chart was slightly over 50 percent. However, the number of men who took and passed the test witnessed a significantly increased from 1980 to 1990. The figure of male candidates who passed the driving test considerably rose by approximately 10 percent from 1980 to 1990.

In addition, from 2000 to 2010, there was a moderate decrease from 68 percent to 65 percent in women who could passed the test. In contrast, the percentages in men chart remained the same at under a half in the same period as women.

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The reporting discussion is uneven. You need to learn to group the information for clarity and better data sharing. Make it easier to understand. This format is a bit confusing to follow. It will be better if you present such discussion in a grouped format next time. That means you will use 3 comparison paragraphs grouped as follows:

Group 1: Males
Group 2: Females
Group 3: Comparison of the 2 genders

By using the above format you will have enough space to clearly identify the important image information. You will be able to better explain what is going on in the image to the reader and in the process, increase your overall scoring consideration.

Here my opinion:
- "it is clear that higher percentage of women who passed the test than men who did in all four years." -->".... that the percentage of women who passed the test was higher than men in all four years"

-"both men and women who passed the exam was fewer than the number in 2000 and 2010" --> "...women passing the exam were fewer than in...."
- "There was around a half of female candidates could passed the driving test in 1980" --> too many errors in this sentences, please recheck it
-"In the next 10 years, the percentage of women was not witnessed a dramatical changes which was shown in the chart was slightly over 50 percent." --> only witnessed, a change, omit "which was shown in the chart was slightly" --> "at over....."

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