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The statistics regarding purchased tickets for cinema, concert and theatre


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Oct 25, 2021   #1

Charts analysis task



The charts below show how selected age groups purchased concert cinema and theatre tickets online over the first three months of 2006 in three countries and how the Internet was accessed.

The bar chart plots the purchase of concert cinema and theatre tickets of two age brackets (25-44, 65+) on the internet through desktop computer, laptop or mobile phone in January, February, March in 2006 in Australia, UK, Malaysia.

In general, the younger group obtained more tickets on the web than the older one, except for Malaysia. The highest total number of people was recorded in Australia while the reserve was true for Malaysia. All three countries were most likely to acquire the tickets from desktop computer, least likely from mobile phone, and among them, Malaysia had the most access to every means.

As regards to the 25-44 age group, Australia equaled UK in the percentage of purchasers, about 65%, moderately higher than Malaysian (nearly 40%). However, in the other category, there was a minor disparity as 40% people in UK bought tickets online, the same as Malaysia whereas Australia still remained the highest.

When it comes to the method to buy tickets, the most popular is by desktop computer, with a vast majority of roughly 60% or more users per nations. Laptop and mobile phone is less typical. There were not as much usage of laptop in the UK as in Australia and Malaysia, 30% and 40% respectively. The utilization of mobile phone, on the other hand, is quite even, with Malaysia slightly higher.



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Oct 26, 2021   #2
and how the Internet was accessed.

This is a topic usrelated to the first image. It must be presented as a seperate sentence so as not to confuse the first image representation. This is a confusing sentence that will recieve grammar deductions due to a confusing statement presentation. This is a severe error that continues in the the trending statement / paragraph. I am afraid this will be a major concern during the actual test and lead to a failing final score.

The writer has made a clear effort to present a professional report. This will not be lost on the examiner. However, the lack of clear reporting style is what will weigh heavily on the final scoring considerations.
Charlie William 3 / 2 2  
Oct 26, 2021   #3
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Here is my comment to your writing. I do think this is good writing, and you still need to extend their grammatic ranges and your sentence structures.

Great job


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