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Staying at hotels when holidaying abroad is not the method to comprehend a nation and the people liv



Carrious 2 / 2  
Sep 17, 2020   #1
Some people say that staying in a hotel in a foreign country when on holiday is not the best way to get to know about the country and its people.

Do you agree or disagree?



To some, staying at hotels when holidaying abroad is not the method to comprehend a nation and the people living in it. From my point of view, I consider myself in agreement with the statement.

For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reckon that having an oversea holiday to learn about a country and its people is the best method. One of the main reasons is that hotels always offer tourists good and luxury services to confine them within the hotel zone to enjoy those services. It leads to the notion that quite a few tourists frequently be too lazy to discover the nation they are traveling just because of spending time on the services of the hotels. To make sense of that, for instance, quite a few hotels provide luxury meals and playing rooms to tourists so that they may take a whole day within the hotel zone.

Another reason is that doing so causes tourists to fail to obtain the knowledge they want in an oversea country. Therefore, people cannot realize the local culture or even what happens outside the zone of the hotels when they are in that zone. Quite a few harmful impacts may place pressure on local tourism because of transferring the wrong information about the country by tourists. To several tourists, sharing wrongly the knowledge they know is frequently happen, because sometimes they do not realize the knowledge they obtained is the case or not.

To conclude, my point is that if tourists want to comprehend more about a foreign country's culture and people, just go out of the comfortable zone and experience more so that they can know whatever they want. (281 words)

Thank you for reading my essay, hope you to tell me what I need to improve my writing skill as well as what aspects that my essay needs to be corrected are.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Sep 18, 2020   #2
You need to develop a better way of paraphrasing. Aim to produce 3-5 sentences for that presentation. For this prompt, I would have done it this way.

When on vacation, people tend to stay in paid lodgings. These inns are where the tourists often get to know the country. However, this is not seen by most people as the prime way of learning about the nation. I support this statement because hotels tend to make people stay in one place for their vacation.

Then from there, you can use other topic sentences , 2 topic sentences, one per paragraph to help explain your theory that hotels tend to keep the vacationers in one place so they do not really get to know the country and its people. Always connect the reasons to the hotel stay. In this instance Your two reasons are:

- Hotels offer luxury services in a staged setting
- This leads to people not learning about the country because they only see local tourism

You did not write a concluding summary as required. You only repeated other supporting reasons for the concluding summary section. Therefore, the essay will be considered open ended, even if you wrote 281 words. You need to merely summarize by offering a short version of your discussion paragraphs and original topic in that portion to meet the required format.


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