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Students should be equipped with both knowledge and practical skills during their time at schools.


hyperephania 3  
Jul 7, 2018   #1

The aim of study at an University



Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.

What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?


Many people believe that students should be equipped with both knowledge and practical skills during their time at schools. However, others claim that universities should only perform their traditional function which is providing knowledge. This essay sheds light on both point of views and presents my own opinion.

Obviously, practical courses are of tremendous benefits to both graduates and universities. From a personal perspective, students who are well equipped with practical skills have more job opportunities. Undergraduates would have no worries about what to do after graduation. Also, it takes companies and institutions that hire skillful employees no extra time to train them. Consequently, this acts as a precursor to building up the university's reputation in the labor market.

Still, there are some reasons to argue that knowledge is the only necessary thing to be taught at schools. Firstly, undergraduates would have more time to acquire mastery in their academic fields once they do not have to spend time participating in practical courses. Teaching would be more effective and students' knowledge would be dramatically improved. Obviously, education quality would be raised and the universities could also acquire reputations, yet in the academic fields.

In my opinion, undergraduates should be provided with both knowledge and practical skills. This would facilitate students' building careers after graduation. Although strong background means that one can produce work of outstanding quality, practical skills are of the same importance once he happens to deal with problems in work.

To summary, while the benefits of teaching students knowledge allow them to build strong backgrounds in academic fields, some still feel that universities should provide skills that might be necessary in work. However, as long as we keep in mind the importance of practical skills in work contexts, the benefits of teaching them in schools are clearly positive.
feliciatu  
Jul 8, 2018   #2
Nice essay with structural paragraphs.

Here are some of my idea of rewriting your sentences.

... courses have tremendous benefits to both students ...

... would have enough time to master in the field ...
Furthermore, the teacher would help to improve the knowledge of students during the course.
Holt [Contributor] 1530  
Jul 8, 2018   #3
Mu, this is a direct opinion essay. You should have indicated your personal opinion as part of the thesis statement at the end of your prompt paraphrase. In addition to that, being a direct opinion essay, you are being asked to make a decision within the discussion. This seems to be your main weakness when you work with direct opinion / answer essays. You cannot make a decision about which side to support. I keep reminding you that all IELTS Task 2 essays are single opinion essays unless you are asked to discuss both sides. In this instance, you failed to recognize that you are being asked to pick just one side to strongly defend within the body of paragraphs discussions.

Since you agree that undergraduates should be equipped with both knowledge and skills, then that should have bene your thesis statement, with the second paragraph introducing your first reason for your belief, with an additional 1 or 2 paragraphs that can offer a solid example or extra supporting evidence or data for the stand you support. Remember, your C&C score depends on the complete explanation of your stance on an issue, your TA score depends upon how well you executed the instruction you were provided. Your GRA will improve if you focus on just discussing one topic. I believe I reminded you about how to improve your TA and GRA score based on a single opinion discussion and you said you were going to try it next time. I think you forgot about it :-)

In this type of essay, your personal opinion goes to the top, the second paragraph, the remaining 2 body paragraphs should support your claims through explanation and examples. Do the next direct question essay in that manner and you should be able to get a better score for the practice test.
OP hyperephania 3  
Jul 9, 2018   #4
Merged:

REWRITE - Should universities equip undergraduates with professional skills?



Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.

What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?


Many people believe that students should be equipped with both knowledge and practical skills during their time at schools. Whereas, others claim that universities should only perform their traditional function which is providing knowledge. However, I totally agree that a university should broaden undergraduates' professional experiences, and at the same time teach them academic knowledge for various reasons.

First and foremost, from a personal perspective, students who are well-equipped with professional skills have more job opportunities. With practical skills that they have been taught at universities, graduates have no worries about what to do after graduation. Obviously, employers nowadays tend to recruit people with considerable experiences in work so that they do not have to train new employees. Hence, no matter how broad one's knowledge is, he can hardly stand a chance in recruitment without some professional skills.

Secondly, experienced students might find it ways easier to deal with confusing problems at work. It is undoubtedly that sometimes, employers are required to do a lot of multi-tasking and be capable of meeting the deadlines of some projects. Apparently, only employees that are well-equipped with all the necessary knowledge related to several positions within their range can overcome such situations.

Last but not least, graduates with practical skills and academic knowledge act as a precursor to building up a university's reputation. There is nowhere better than schools for employers to recruit newly graduated but experienced employers. Obviously, universities that help employers train their staff beforehand might be appreciated and gain their loyalty. In turn, professional skills guarantee graduates' job opportunities after graduation. Hence, parents would have no worries about their children's future after graduation when sending them to such universities.

In conclusion, I would maintain that tertiary education should equip undergraduates with both academic knowledge and professional skills.

@Holt I rewrite my essay regarding your advices. I am still not sure if I have captured all the points you mentioned. I hope it is better than the previous essay.


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