A number of people believe mathematics and science have beenare the most essential subjects for the development of humanity.
.... better to keep this sentence in present tense.
due to2two reasons:
.... this is a writing task and you write an essay. So don't have numbers, but the words only. :)
Excellent introduction.... Very good presentation of ideas. Also you have followed the most appropriate structure :)
First of all, culture and experience have been contributed by history and literature.
.... this sounds confusing :( .... Its really difficult to catch your idea too
The evolution of human has been based on history
.... this is wrong ... how can evolution be based on history? ....History reveals us how evolution happened.
You need to pay attention to keeping alignment to your topic throughout the essay...It's very important :)