Essay:Studying at home by using technology or studying at traditional schools?

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In the future,students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at at traditional schools.Which would you prefer?Use reasons and specific detals to explain your choice.

When faced with the decision of studying at traditional schools or studying at home with the help of technology such as computers or televisions,quite a few would claim

that traditional teaching methods at schools are the most effective ways improving your study and irreplaceable,but others,in contrast,deem studying at home by using technology as the premier choice and that is also my point.There are numerous reasons why I choose this method of studying,and I would explore only a few of the most important ones here.

The main reason Why I agree with the above statement is that using technology in study makes you independent and more creative because at traditional schools,you almost always work under the guide of teachers,especially when you face up to problems in study,you don't have to wory as they will show you how to solve them,while at home you have nobody to ask for help except for technology,resulting that you have to find the solutions and do everything on your own with the aid of technology.

Another reason,which is supposed to support my choice, is that teacher at traditional schools try to provide students with a plethora of information and what students have to do is no more than trying to remember all of it,leading students to think that they are forced to remember all the knowledge teachers provide and that is the best way to sudy.In contrast, at home students use technology to study knowledge,that means they have to find information on their own,which is more effective than when they are provided it.Furthermore,only students know what is necessary to them and only when they like can they study better.Additionally,knowledge in

traditional schools is limitted in textbooks,whereas just a click of mouse you can access websites with full of information in any field.
In a word,from reasons I've mentioned above,you might got the idea that I'd prefer studying at home using technology,which I think is the best method of study helping me study better.

College students already do!

...and that they are irreplaceable, but others,in contrast,deem ...------ I just added some words to improve the clarity.

... deem studying at home by using technology as the premier choice, a nd that is also my point.There are numerous reasons why I choose this method of studying,and I would explore only a few of the most important ones here. ---- very nice introduction.

The main reason Why why I agree with ...
even better:
The main reason for my agreement with...

...always work under the guide of teachers -- especially when you face up to problems in study. In school, you don't have to worry about problems, as the teacher will show you how...

In contrast, at home students use technology to study knowledge subjects, and that means they have to find information on their own, which is more effective than when they are provided it.---- Good point! That is called "active learning" or "cognitive engagement of the learning material."

Additionally,knowledge in traditional schools is limited to textbooks, whereas just a click of mouse you can access websites with full of information in any field. In a word,from reasons I've mentioned above,you might get the idea that I'd prefer studying at home using technology,which I think is the best method of study. helping me study better.

Well, I disagree!! :-D In a traditional classroom, computers are used. In a traditional classroom, teachers try to achieve active learning. In a traditional classroom, teachers often require students to find the answers themselves. So, traditional classrooms have everything online classrooms have and one more thing: a teacher!