Hi,Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Some people believe that when something occurs, it happened and we do not need to see these events to find any value from them. I, however, disagree with this type of thinking. I, personally, believe that the past is a sufficient light for future, because of, its opportunity of learning from famous people treatments and utilization of other men experiences.
The lives of famous people in the history of each nation are the appropriate examples of how we can be a successful person in our life. Besides, the behaviors of those, give this chance to us to find a not only brilliant but also adequate way to prosperity. For instance, all of us know the Tomas Edison, who was the inventor of electricity; we can study his personal characteristics to find that what the important parameters of his achievements were. In addition, sociologists affirm that the stories of famous human being are the best motivator of present people to work hard for finding their way.
Secondly, the application of other people experiences is such an effective way that we can learn many things from them. Use of other people experiments is one of the most important ways of learning of life's difficulties, when you do not need to do them personally. Therefore, you have this comfortable occasion to not repeat the same errors. For example, by seeing my father's life and finding his faults in his whole life, I never insist to walk in his way, while I know that this path will be a blind alley.
To conclusion, studying people and events of the past time is more useful to find the causes of failures and victories. We can learn many things from the life of famous people, so we can follow them to gain our dreams. Furthermore, the flaws of other people life show us the distinctive manner tending the wrong ways.P.S: I have a real trouble with time, do you have any idea to solve this problem? for example this essay took me 56 mins !!
this reply regards to your request about time management (I should leave writing assessment for experts). It's because I had the same problem and have strive to find a new way. here what I've got :
you should put quota on what you want to do. In Toefl, we have only 30 minutes. A piece of good writing takes at least 40 minutes from a non-English speaker like us (without revising it). So working from scratch is the worst thing one can do. a good way is to dedicate 3 minutes to planning(what is your preference, what is your main points, and think of two details for each one), 20 to writing(including introduction, 2 or 3 main paragraphs and one conclusion, each is 6 minutes) and 7 to revision(Please note PS1).
Another job is to practice more and more. These practices may finally lead to a certain structure, which you can use in Toefl's writing in order to speed up your writing. I don't mean "memorizing" certain words or collocations (which leads to a worse score, according to what Toefl men say). I mean when you write at least 10 essays, then you know how to introduce your essay, how to present each idea into an independent but coherent paragraph, and how to conclude what you've said before and wrap it up.
finally, find your words. every person talks and writes in a unique way. It means that we have our own words when talking or writing. When writing, you may use the same exact way of talking in your native language and write its equivalent in your paper or screen. So, what happens? you stick on words. you waste a lot of your time CONVERTING the meaning from your mother-tongue to English. Instead of that, you should find your own words in English, and this doesn't happen unless you read and read and write and write.
Here was what I use when writing, and it answered to me.
PS1 : "How to prepare for the toefl essay"'s barrons book dedicates 5 minutes to planning, 20 minutes to writing and the rest to revision. However, believe me that this doesn't work(or at least doesn't work best). In my PRACTICES, I've found that 5 minutes is much more than needed, because when you begin writing, new ideas come to your mind, so this seems a little waste of time to put one sixth of your time in planning. Besides, experience shows that when you revise your essay, you see mistakes that make you laugh, because they are so stupid. So if you don't have enough time to correct them, you make your referee to laugh, and guess what happens to your score.
what I can suggest about the timings is...
1.Do practice with timer on. Say 20 mins for typing. Try to complete it in 2o min. This would provide you % mins for checking.
2. If you make spelling mistakes while typing than correct as soon as you finish your sentence. This would prevent your spelling correction time in the end,and you can utilise that time in other corrections.
3. Try to complete the proper format of your essay first so that later on you can include sentences or other correction in the last 5 mins. This would make your essay complete with the format, and you will not run out of time.
Because of the rain, I stayed home-- comma
I stayed home because of the rain -- no comma
Personally, I think---comma
I personally think ---no comma
Besides, the behaviors of those, give this chance to us to find a not only brilliant but also adequate way to prosperity. --i can't understand this sentence.
For instance, all of us know
the Tomas Edison
we can study his personal characteristics to find
that what the important parameters of his achievements were
to work hard
for findingto find their way
...difficulties, when you don't need them / ...difficulties when you don't need them
To conclusion / To conclude
Thanks for your pieces of advice about using the comma,
I think it is better to say:
Besides, the behaviors of those, give this chance to us to find a a brilliant and adequate way to prosperity. (instead of previous one)
"Besides, the behaviors of those, give this chance to us to find a not only brilliant but also adequate way to prosperity" I think something is wrong, but not quit sure.
Besides means in addition to. Perhaps, do you want to say In adition, instead?
Also, when you stayed "the behaviors of those", Does the word those refers to people?
what about this:
The lives of famous people in the history of each nation are the appropriate examples of how successful a person can be. In addition/Moreover, their behaviors encourage us to find and follow a path to prosperity.
Yes, maybe your sentence is better than mine
but i have a question about "those", in the exam it is better to use pronoun or the exact reference?
I do not think is wrong to use those if you have an antecedent. However, i thing is better tu use those followed by a noun.
Besides ,In addition , the behaviors of those people , [those refers to the adjetive] give this chance to us the chance to find a not only a brilliant, but also an adequate way to prosperity."
hitchhike, anyway, my suggestion is to ask somebody else. I am telling you what makes sense for me. Remember I am a english learner. Perhaps, a moderator could help us.
PS. I like the structure of your essays. Please, if you have a chance, take a look at my writing and give me your thougts. I am pretty sure you will have a good advice for me.