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Every success is because of hard working, luck has not much in common with success.

naseernasrati 14 / 33 10  
Nov 15, 2017   #1
prompt: Every success is because of hard working. Luck has nothing with success. (do you agree or disagree)

Success without being lucky?

Every success in the life is because of hard working, nothing will be achieved with lick.. From my perspective, I agree because when people graduate from universities, get good jobs and receive high salary, it's the result of hard working not luck.

Firstly, as far as I am concerned, when people study at university or college they have to work hardly to succeed in the exams, otherwise they will fail or get a low score. For example, when I was studying civil engineering one of my classmates had the highest score because he had tried to achieve that lack had nothing with his success. When people don't study before the exams they will never receive a high score. So, success in exams which is necessary in our lives depends to hard working not luck.

Also, nowadays jobs are competitive and can be taken by success in the exams. When one wants to get a job he/she has to get prepare for an exam by and success in the exam to get the job. If people don't study hardly for jobs exams and wait for luck they will not get the job and finally they will be regret. During getting a job, for most of professions luck is nothing, high score is acceptable which can be achieved by hard working. Therefore, luck has nothing, hard work is helpful.

Moreover, people who worked hardly for their profession get high salary. During working in an organization, there are a lot of employees; the one who work hard will receive the high salary. If the one wait for luck, he/she will never receive a high salary. For example, I am working in an organization where, 20 employees are working together. Two of us receive the highest salary because they work hardly, not because of luck. Hard work has the highest income; luck is nothing to get a high salary.

To conclude, from my experience, people can success in every part of their life, if they work hardly for their targets. Luck has nothing to success in achieving the goals. From studying in the university to getting a job and high salary the one should work hardly to success, otherwise he/she will never achieve the goal. Every success is because of hard work, luck is not helpful in becoming success in the life.
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Nov 15, 2017   #2
Naseer, are you discussing a Task 2 essay or a Direct Response question? It appears that the prompt is for a Task 2 presentation but you are opting to treat it as a Direct Response essay. Please clarify the type of essay that you are discussing with your next practice test because the advice for each type of essay varies. Since each essay type has a specific discussion method, I want to be sure that I am giving you the correct advice regarding the essay development each time.

Pay particular attention to your punctuation and grammar. Any misspelled word indicates a lack of English vocabulary skills and will affect your LR score. Look at this mistake that you made:

Every success in the life is because of hard working, nothing will be achieved with lick..

The mistakes in this sentence are:

1. Word Usage -
"Working" should be "work" because working denotes the act of "work" .
"Lick" means to pass the tongue over a surface. You were supposed to say "luck" meaning success or failure brought on by chance.
The mistakes show a lack of English vocabulary familiarity and incapability to use the terms in the correct context.

2. ... (ellipses) should have been a simple period. Maybe this was a mistake regarding key punching on your end or maybe it was intentional. Whatever it was, the presentation of that line should have ended with a period, as in a statement, instead.

The rest of the essay contains applicable statements that can help to increase your final score. The problem, is that your opening statement has some serious flaws that would have a direct effect on your final scoring considerations.
rowliejohnflores 6 / 13 5  
Nov 17, 2017   #3
It is understandable that your English is limited but certain parts of your essay I was lost. For instance,

Therefore, luck ... I would rewrite this as,"Therefore, luck is not as essential as hard work."

I would also watch for errors such as Moreover, people who worked hardly for ... The "-ly" in hardly is not needed.
Tuan Anh 16 1 / 5  
Nov 19, 2017   #4
In my opinion :
work hardly ---> work hard
add " comma" between engineering and one ---> , one of....
Thank you for consideration
Ashkan123 12 / 33 2  
Nov 19, 2017   #5
@naseernasrati, You did a great job. But still, you need more practice same as all of us:). I am not sure if I am right or not, but I think it is not the worse idea if you can explain a little bit more why some people disagree. what are their concerns, and how come it is not really a big deal? Anyway, good job! way to go.

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