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Writing Task 1: Summaries of the dissimilar time before and after expansion and it cost in traveling


hirani03 36 / 50 5  
Aug 15, 2016   #1
There are two information shared the table and the bar chart. The table explained about the different time before and after improvements made to the transport network, while the bar chart told about the different cost in traveling around the city.

The table presents that the fastest way to journey before improvement was taxi. It took nine minutes. The taxi then took 3 minutes longer after development. Different with taxi, the tram was reduced 6 minutes after enhancement. There were two forms of carrying that reduced time after perfection. There were tram and bus. There were also two forms of transportation that increased after perfection. Those were taxi and car. The slowest transport is by bus. The bus still became the slowest before and after improvement.

The most expensive cost of the vehicle was taxi. I was almost Є2.00 per kilometer. In contrast, the bus was the cheapest concurrently the slowest transport to use around the city. The different price of the tram and bus was really near. The difference was only about Є0.10.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 16, 2016   #2
Hi Hikuma.
I am always curious to read your writing. In a couple of days, you show the better progress. However, I will give you suggestions about the essential grammar in the writing task 1. Let me explain that.


There are two PIECES OF information shared IN the table and the bar chart.
The table explained EXPLAINS about the different time before and after improvements made to OF the transport network, while the bar chart told DISPLAYS (You should utilize the simple present as you show the fact.)

The table presents GIVES THE KEY POINT that the fastest way to journey before improvement was A taxi.
It took TAKES nine minutes.
Different with THE taxi, THE TIME SPENT BY the tram was is reduced 6 minutes
There were ARE two forms
Note: I do not exactly know why you have not attached the picture. In the next term, you have to pay attention. I think you should harness the simple present since you review abut the fact data. Following that, I know that abusing the article (a/an/the) is the minor error, but it will affect your score. One of the essential factors is to include the language of the comparison. I did not sense the impressive information because it seemed listing the data.

I suggest you to read more examples of the writing task 1 so that you can get the primary point for measurement indicator of the writing.

Practice is the key to improve your English.
Practice more and more.
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