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IELTS Task 1: Summarize a map of the city of Brandfield


eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 14, 2014   #1
Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The ongoing development of a new shopping centre in the two locations of Brandfield city appears in the map.

As it can be seen from the map, S2 is surrounded by a small resident area. Also, in the north and south of its map, there are two rust belt cities. The busy main road from Cransdon to Bransdon and vice versa is linked to the center of town, where S2 is sited in. This area might be pointed as the best location of a new shopping centre, perhaps reflecting how important it is to local population who live around there. So, can we conclude that the S1 has no bargains for a better spot?

Presumably, due to S1 located in countryside between the main road and the railway to Hindon, there is a high probability that S1 would show a great merit. People from the town centre and the other outskirts could use train and car to this area, while the use of transportation in the area of S2 is not allowed.

In the end, the development of a new shopping mall in the two proposed sites has raised pros and cons amongst developers in the city of Brandfield.

P.S. This is my first writing. I'm welcoming for everyone who wants to share ideas and comments. Please kindly give me some advice to improve my writing. Thanks in advance.




znack 7 / 31 5  
Jan 14, 2014   #2
Hi

development of a new shopping centre in the two locations

There is one shopping centre and two proposed locations,so you should mansion it,as well as summarize information about the better place to build.

S2 is surrounded

You cannot write like this,S2 is not a thing,it is a place,area,location,site. Thus,it should be the location for shopping centre (S2) is situated in the resident area.

So, can we conclude that the S1 has no bargains for a better spot?

Never use question sentences in task 1. It is not an essay!

I do believe that creation of two separate paragraphs about each location is a good idea.
Otherwise, you can use first paragraph to compare locations in terms of destination from different areas , and second para in comparison to other cities.

Anyway good luck.
OP eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 14, 2014   #3
Hi znack,

You cannot write like this,S2 is not a thing,it is a place,area,location,site. Thus,it should be the location for shopping centre (S2) is situated in the resident area

Well, I thought I could refer S2/S1 to 'area', 'location' and so forth, but S2/S1 isn't appropriate for this time. Thank you

.

So, can we conclude that the S1 has no bargains for a better spot?
Never use question sentences in task 1. It is not an essay!

I tried to use this kind of style "question sentences" after reading one of IELTS books, but after you say it isn't suitable for this report. Then, I'd do what you've shown me for my next writing.

Thanks again, znack.
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jan 15, 2014   #4
So, can we conclude that the S1 has no bargains for a better spot?

I think this sentence should be the different paragraf, because it has coherence with the next paragraf (paragraf 3)


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