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Summary of TED How does cancer spread through the body ? (Ivan Seah Yu Jun )


Ifan21 22 / 24 2  
Sep 26, 2016   #1
Cancer has become common problem yet thorny problem in this latter-days. Even so, this complicated matter has not been resolved yet. The predominant qiestion comes cancer distribution through our body as known as 'metastasis'. According to Ivan S.Y.J's explanation, there are three major mechanism-spreading cancers proliferate and infect normal tissues such as, Transcoelomic, lymphatic and hematogenous. Firstly, in trancoelomic the spread of a malignancy into body cavities can occur via penetrating the surface (Peritoneal cavity). another mechanism, Lymphatic occurs when the cancer infects lymph node and travel to other part of the body. the last mechanism is called hematogenous, it happen when cancer proliferate into the blood stream. As the blood vessels exist in every part of the body, cancer utilize it to broaden their network. During the cell undergo proliferation, it forms small tumor known as micrometastases. This form will complete the process tend to be specific site of metastasis.

bismillah 15 / 29 1  
Sep 26, 2016   #2
hi friend i have some suggestions for making better in your essay

The predominant question comes

travel to other parts of ....

it happens when cancer ,,,,

please you have to pay more conscientiously about word spell and grammatical error
i hope it can help you
good luck//
Iedha01 21 / 40  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Hi Ifan21,
You've done a good job, however, there are some mistakes I noticed, let me show you

-The predominant QIESTION comes cancer distribution ...

In my opinion, you should simplify your sentence in order the reader will catch your notion clearly, while you don't miss your powerful words. Your sentence should be

-Metasis is a predominant questions coming from cancer distribution through our body.
-Ivan S.Y.J stated that the three major mechanism-spreading cancers proliferate and infect normal tissues such as, Transcoelomic,lymphatic and hematogenous.

I do hope it helps
mdamanhuri77 22 / 35 3  
Sep 27, 2016   #4
Cancer has become a common problem yet because thorny problem in ...
The predominant qiestionquestion comes cancer distribution ...
... infect normal tissues such as, Transcoelomic, lL ymphatic and hH ematogenous.
aA nother mechanism, Lymphatic occurs when the cancer ...
the last mechanism is called hematogenous, it happens when cancer ...
... it forms small tumor known as mM icrometastases.

repetition of "occurs",,you change it with other words such as happen, held in,
you have done @ Ifan21..break a leg


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