Hello! It's my second day for making summary so I hope you can give me a good advise. This is the summary about TED Talks video, the real title is " My Green School Dream" by John Hardy. Just like before, I put the link below if you interested to watch full video.
John Hardy is a Canadian who has diselexia. When he was a kid he had a hard time at school. Almost everyday he cried when he came back from school. Then he gave up. He ran away. When he was 25 years old he went to Bali and met an amazingly beautiful woman, Shinta, who fullfilled his life as his wife.
For 20 years, John with his wife di a bussiness, but then, he closed his bussiness because he felt tired of it. In his free time, her wife took him to see a film he didn't want to see, the title is " An Inconvenient Truth, Global Warming" by Mr. Al Gore. This film influenced him a lot. Like he said, " This film ruin my life, Mr. Gore!". So, he wanted to did whatever he could to unprove the posibility.
The Green School came as a solution and inovation to make a better life, a green life. The classrooms have no wall, teachers write on a bamboo board and the desks are not square. John wanted his student can graduate as a whole person,that's why he used a holistic method for his school.
The student at The Green School just not learn about math, reading and writing, but they also learn about how to plant organic rice and organic vegetable, until how to harvest and cook it. The children should know, how to life in the future.
Local what is local is another Hardy's slogan. Because of it, 21 percent of the student is Balinesse. Right now, people around the world are supporting scholarships for the Balinesse Student, so Hardy hopes that he can make Balinesse Next Green Leader.
Link : ted.com/talks/john_hardy_my_green_school_dream#t-794855
Hello!! Here are a few grammatical errors to fix! If I did not include a sentence then it did not need to be corrected. also if there is a question mark, I am not sure if you want to use the word I picked. I hope this helps!
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Halo Ms. Dina, it is great to see your second article on EF and also it was an interesting summarize. However, i have a few notices about your article especially to make your summarize is more good enough.
on your article, there are sentences "When he was a kid he had......" and "Then he gave up. He ran away." From my point of view, it is better for you to use child than kid to make readers more understand with your character stories. And also to make your summarize more short, try to combine the short words, such as "Then he gave up and ran away." I think just enough from me, and keep practice Ms. Dina!!
