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Summary : the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java



Fadhilahumar91 61 / 68  
Aug 27, 2016   #1
This essay is a summary an article was written by Chelsea white. The original title is "the mission to find the world's rarest cat in jungles of Java". That article has explained about Anthony Giordano's expedition. He found that Java fishing is a subspecies of cat in Java, Indonesia. It use their paws to grab fish from the water which is uncommon cat species in the world.

Java fishing cat has been specific track and we can discover it by semi-retractable claw system. However, their habitat and the destiny of subspecies is unidentified. According to historical record, this cat spread in wetlands and was across South-East Asia. The fishing cat research indicate that the part of rare species has been existence in the world. In conclusion, as the final Giordano's expedition, that he has focused to find on the evidence of Java fishing cat habitat and their spread area.

akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Aug 27, 2016   #2
Hi Miss Dhyla.
I am pleased to read your writing because you have shown the rapid positive progress for writing skill.
Please, you review and deal with my suggestions below
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This essay is a summary an article ...
THIS SUMMARY ORIGINATES FROM AN ARTICLE WROTE BY CHELSEA WHITE.
That article has explained about Anthony ...
It useS their paws to grab fish from the water which is uncommon cat ...

Java fishing cat has been A specific track, and we can discover it by A semi-retractable claw system. However, their (REFERS TO..???) habitat and the ...

According to A historical record, this THESE catS spread in wetlands ...
The fishing cat research indicateS that the part of rare species ...
... that he has focused to find ON FINDING on the evidence of Java fishing ...

Note: Pay attention to the meaning of your sentences. Make you sure that what you write is what you mind.
OVERALL, IT'S A GOOD JOB
ekalamarsyari11 72 / 101  
Aug 27, 2016   #3
That article has explained about ... => you should use simple past tense because this article was published in the past.

It useuses[remember about subject singular/plural] their paws to grab fish ...

... destiny of subspecies isare unidentified

According to a historical record

this cat these cats spread in wetlands and was across South-East Asia

keep practice miss dila :-)
ashelarisa48 36 / 47  
Aug 28, 2016   #4
Well done, Miss Dhila! :) this is a little correction from me.

This essay is a summary of an article was written by Chelsea white.

The original title is "the a mission to find the ...

It uses their paws to grab fish ...

Java fishing cat has been a specific track and we ...

... and the destiny of subspecies is are unidentified.

The fishing cat research indicates that the part of rare ...

... final Giordano's expedition, that he has focused to find on the evidence of Java fishing ...


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