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Summary News from BBC: Aid reaches Madaya and other besieged towns



Afdhel 14 / 19  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
For the first time in almost six months, humanitarian has been sent to four besieged region in Syria.

According to the international comitte of the Red Cross, the emergent aid, such as brought food, medical supplies and hygiene kits for 60,000, has been delivered by Seventy-one lorries reached Madaya and Zabadani, near Damascus, and Foah and Kefraya, in Idlib province.

As reported, the aid such as Seventy-one lorries reached region of Madaya and Zabadani, near Damascus, and Foah and Kefraya, in Idlib province, on Sunday.

In the midst of besieged, the aid can help children and many civilian who have been suffering since 6 months ago. Even less the UN suspended aid deliveries across Syria for 48 hours after a deadly attack to the convoy.

akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hello Pizarro..
Welcome to Essay Forum. I am delighted to tell you that you have been the right medium to improve your written skill. Let me help you to finalize.


Actually, before you describe contents of your summary, you should display an introduction sentence about its resource. For example
THIS SUMMARY IS EXTRACTED FROM AN ORIGINAL ARTICLE ON BBC.COM IN 2016 ABOUT....................


... has been sent to four besieged regionS in Syria.

According to the international comitte COMMITTEE of the Red Cross, the emergent aid...

... children and many civilianS who have been suffering (...) after a deadly attack to ON the convoy.

NOTE:
I cannot offer a large number of suggestions because you have not passed requirement of a good paragraph. Keep in your mind that each good paragraph has at least 3 sentences. Honestly, almost all paragraph only consist of one sentence. When you wanna construct the summary, you have to remember essential elements in the summary. First, you illustrate the resource where you take the article. After that, you explain the content of the article. To strengthen your description, you are supposed to iinclude the supporting sentences. You don't give detailed information which can appear the question. It is important to note that you can explain the elements (What, Why, When, Who, Where, and How).


I really believe you can master this skill on condition that you wanna provide much time to practice more and more.
Keep Fighting
Happy writing.


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