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(IELTS ES) Summary the one of National Geoghaphic's article



rasedasda24 2 / 2  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
It is the Susan O'Keefe's journey with her husband for Nat Geo Expeditions. they have visited the Canadian Rockies. The trip have started from Calgary to Vancouver. In that spot they made plenty of stops along the way, including Banff and Jasper National Parks and Whistler and Victoria, British Columbia for 12 days.

First, they spent time at Elaho-Squamish River with their favorite activity which is water rafting. They felt amazing sensation when they should traverse terrain otherwise inaccessible way. This is not wasted journey because they got the impressive views of the world's most glaciated mountain range. Not only throwing the river but also climbing up a rock ledge and jumping into a pool of chilly blue water that they did it.

In the beautiful Lake Louise in Banff National Park, they knew about uniquely colorless lake with snowcapped peaks landscaping the scent of fresh forest pine. In that spot there is historical place as called as Lake Agnes Tea House that provide good tasted hot tea and best homemade desserts. Hiking in the Athabasca Glacier is the great choice. It is not hard to see Canadian wildlife in that place, such as mountain goats, caribou, grizzly bears, wolves, moose, and so on.

At the night they tried to watch incredible late sunset and stargaze in Miette Hot Spring which is still one area with Jasper National Park that is considered the second largest dark sky preserve in the world and hosts of stargazing events.

In western coast of Vancouver Island, they took a long coastal hike with accompanied by best landscape of Olympic Peninsula, revealing blue skies, and sparkling Pacific water. As travel cover, they visited Victoria which rich about traditional cultural attraction and mouth-watering seafood cuisine.

From mountain peaks to massive glaciers and Tiffany blue lakes, there was spectacular scenery everywhere they looked, and remarkable experience for them.

Giansy11 18 / 30  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hi Rasedasda..
You can deliver well your summary, but i found some mistakes. lemme show you

It is the Susan O'Keefe's journey with her ...
do not use article

In that spot there is historical place (...) Tea House that provide good tasted hot tea ...
pay attention to verb that you use in one sentence.

At the night they watchedtried to watch incredible late sunset and stargaze in Miette Hot Spring which is still onewhere it same areas with Jasper National Park that is ...
justivy03 - / 2265  
Sep 27, 2016   #3
Hi Asda, I believe this is the first review I will do for your essay and right off the bat, I must say that this summary is full of adjectives that helped describe in very fine details what is in the story and this summary also featured all there is to know and understand in order to discover the destination.

Overall, as much as the ideas and information help elaborate the sense that you are trying to convey to your readers, the adjectives, verbs as well as the minor details such as the linking verbs and stand alone phrases are great addition to your essay and this is what you did in your summary essay. You made sure that all the points and contents are covered to create that substance needed for your essay.

What else is there is for you to keep writing, though I know that your essay can still be enhanced, I believe it comes in time and practice of course. Keep writing.


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