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Article Summary: One of two lions that escaped from an enclosure in Leipzig zoo in Germany



goldieu 5 / 8  
Oct 3, 2016   #1
There are male lions, Majo and Motshegetsi, in Leipzig zoo in Germany damaging the fence and jump out of the cage before the zoo opened. Although one of the lions was back to the cage, another lion that is outside the enclosure should be shot in this case because of the personal safety had to take priority. They succeeded in returning one of the lions three hours later with the aid of a fence, but the other lion became agitated as they tried to calm it. Local media said Majo had survived, but Motshegetsi had been killed. The director said that the enclosure had been at the zoo for 15 years. They never had a problem before, but now they will review their security at that zoo. Crowds built up at the entrance to the zoo, but it was closed on Thursday because of the lions' escape. The last time lions escaped from their enclosure in Leipzig zoo was in 1913, prompting a widespread hunt that ended with all six lions being killed.

korbansuspendcuy 8 / 13  
Oct 3, 2016   #2
Hi..
your essay is quite brief..
I have some additions for your essay..

another lion that is[you do not need to give "that" as "outside" is already an adverb] outside the (...) in this case because of["because of" is followed by object of preposition, not subject and verb] the personal safety ...

... but the other lion became agitated as they[who do they refer to? it is a little bit confusing] tried to calm it.

Keep writing..
David54 15 / 20  
Oct 4, 2016   #3
Hallo,

There are several correction for you,

...in Leipzig zoo in Germany that is damaging the fence and jump out....
...another lion that is in the outside of cagethe enclosure should be shot (...) personal safety had to takehas to be a priority....
... returning one of the lions after three hours later with the ...


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