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IELTS task 1: A survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company.


eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 20, 2014   #1
The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Answer:

The given bar chart presents the findings of a research examining the two different age groups of workers and the measurement of job performance indicators. The data is taken from a hiring and training department at a leading company.

In general, it can be seen from the chart the factors of respecting from colleagues and competent boss influence job performance for old workers, while the young ones seem more likely to have contributory factors.

Turning to the details, workers aged 18-30 and 45-60 year old have an almost sizable proportion of team spirit and work environment, with approximately 50-and-30 per cent. In the case of job satisfaction and money, these two factors area likely to influence the young workers with a slight difference than that of old workers, which the comparison of job satisfaction is 50 and 49% and which of money is 70 and 69% of both groups.

A more detailed look at the data shows that the factors of working environment and personal development affecting young workers estimate more double proportion, nearly 96 vs 40 per cent, while promotion prospects shows more than three times of percentages of old workers, with 25 vs 80 per cent. However, the competent boss could influence more slightly in percentage of workers aged 45-60. Again, the old workers have more respect to their co-workers than that of workers who have young age.

Clearly, there are 10 factors which can affect job performance, but these factors cannot work closely together on both groups of workers.




lhs12 1 / 9  
Jan 20, 2014   #2
interesting.
OP eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jan 21, 2014   #3
Thank you..., Anyway, can you please show which part of my writing above looks interesting for you, as the reader?

Any comments would be appreciated it.
MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Jan 21, 2014   #4
The given bar chart presents the findings of a research examining the two different age groups of workers and the measurement of job performance indicators. The data is taken from a hiring and training department at a leading company.

The given bar chart illustrates ten factors that influence work effectiveness of two different age groups in a company.

the factors of respecting from colleagues and competent boss influence job performance for old workers, while the young ones seem more likely to have contributory factors.

This is not very clear.
Overall, workers aged 45 - 60 are more affected by these factors than those aged 18 - 30. While chance for personal development contributes the most to work performance of the former group, the latter group cites money as their main factor for their work efficiency.


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