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The table describes the number of cinema viewers for four type films in four different nationalities


somasalims 15 / 27 5  
Dec 14, 2014   #1
The table describes the number of cinema viewers for four type films in four different nationality; India, Ireland, New Zealand, and Japan. It is measured by millions. Overall, in these countries, it can be seen that the figures of people who watch action films is higher than the other kinds of films. However, compared to the others, Indian is the biggest cinema viewers for most types of films.

The total of people who see horror films is only 15.8 millions. It is approximately half of people who watch action films, 29.9 millions. Furthermore, the number of comedy film viewers is almost same with romance film viewers. It is 19.9 millions for comedy films and 20.3 millions for romance films.

Next, more than 7 millions people view action films in each country. Moreover, the number of horror film viewers no more than 5 millions, except in Ireland. The quantity of Irish who view horror films is 6.4 million.




Misnariah Idrus 19 / 35 4  
Dec 14, 2014   #2
the figures of people who watch action films is higher than the other kinds of films.

"is" refers to "the figures", I think

Indian is the biggest cinema viewers for most types of films.

Indian had the biggest number of cinema viewers...

Moreover , the number of horror film viewers no more than 5 millions, except in Ireland.

Are you sure to the usage of this word? In bahasa, it is translated as "apalagi"

The total of people who see horror films is only 15.8 millions. It is approximately half of people who watch action films, 29.9 millions.

Start it with an additional phrase to make it cohesive with the previous paragraph. You may use "A more detailed look at the the graph reveals that ..."
OP somasalims 15 / 27 5  
Dec 15, 2014   #3
Thank you. It is very helpful to improve my skill in writing.


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