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The tables reveals that the income of bananas was more dominant in comparison to coffee sale money.



nurannisaputry92 36 / 25  
Mar 31, 2016   #1
The tables below give information about sales of fair-trade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables reveal the comparison about sales of fair-trade-labelled coffee and sales of bananas divided in different European nation, and it is measured in million between 1999 and 2004. Overall, it can be seen that majority of countries experienced a significant rise of those product. However, the income of bananas product was more dominant than coffee.

The highest sales in coffee product was Switzerland, which stood at 3, and it rose to 6 in 2004 while both of UK and Denmark had the modest profits of sales in the beginning period, which were 1.5 and 1.8 respectively. However, the sale of UK in 2004 was twenty-fold greater than the previous, which was 20. Belgium and Sweden had a very small number in 1999, and this number remained stable in minority in 2009.

Turning to Bananas, Switzerland was predominantly in sales number in 1999. 2004 saw a sharp growth in number of bananas product at 47 whilst Denmark witnessed a slight rise of 1.1 in the end of year This number was slight larger than Sweden at 1.8, and it decrease steadily to 1 million. UK had total income at 5.5 in 2004, with following this number was five times bigger than 1999. Figure of Belgium inclined by 3.4 million.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Mar 31, 2016   #2
Hi Nur, first stop, I would like to remind you about attaching the table or the diagram in an essay such as this analysis, this will help us determine if you have the right analysis and if you are using the correct words to explain what you understood from the analysis. Now, I will try to edit the essay with the focus on the grammar and the English language standards.

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There you have it Nur, I hope the corrections are helpful.


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