Taks 1 : the employees according to their gender in the Great Britain

A breakdown of the employees according to their gender in the Great Britain of the year in the question is illustrated by bar charts. Overall, males and females show considerable diversity in terms of their jobs. Likewise, the majority of men hold positions as traders and managers when women do paper works and work at the service field most of all.

A closer to look the data, the highest proportion of men is skilled traders at a-fifth of the total, while women hold only 3 percent on this field. In contrast, females work for personal service and administrative and secretarial are the most famous of them , while in this occupation show the least popularity for males (respectively 14% and 23% opposed to 3% and 5 %).

Apart from previous comparison, the only three professions occupied by almost the same number of males and females. Those are professional, associative professional and technical, and elementary jobs with 12-14%, 13-15% and 12% - 11 % respectively.

Lapolo, you have a problem in your second body paragraph. It was too short and contained 'shop listings'. You are not supposed to write three types of data percentage in a single sentence. This will be considered as inappropriate in which it also possible to decrease your band score. The notion is to have you present a complete thought and understanding of all the aspects of the chart you were provided. By limiting yourself to only 2 sentences per paragraph, you fail to display your ability to express yourself in the English language. So the following still needs work.

Apart from previous comparison... Those were... The rest were...

Then, you will be able to depict all the information in the diagram.

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