Talent vs hard-working; importance of environment, desire outweigh any endowment

Abdurasul 32 / 78

May 6, 2014 #1

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a saying in my language: everybody is gifted, but some people never open their package. The majority of people believe that everyone has special talent that suits to the particular sphere of life. At the same time, there are people who say that good sportsmen and musicians are made, not born. Personally, it is my strong belief that the most respectful and dignified people of all time achieved fame thanks for their hard-working, desire and ambitiousness.

To begin with, environment often is more important than talent, because it is the primary factor of the formation of everybody's outlook and consciousness. For example, both western and eastern renaissance were at peaceful times, in other words no science can be developed at a war times. In this sense, even though there were talents at that time, environment didn't let them prosper.

Further and even more importantly, talents are discovered during hard-working. According to statistics, more than 50% of all self-realized people avoided a lot of life joys and worked very hard. For example, Margaret Thatcher was so determined that she got used to sleep just 4-6 hours in a day. As a result, she succeed and achieved fame and respect.

Given these evidences, it can be said that the importance of environment and desire outweigh any endowment, because no talent can exist without them.

skalem 1 / 2

May 6, 2014 #2

Hi,
I liked you essay but I think you should display the two points of view first and their arguments ( this is what your assignment is asking for), then give your opinion at the end . your essay is showing your opinion only

good luck

fikri 5 / 310

May 6, 2014 #3

According to statistics , more than 50% of all self-realized people avoided a lot of life joys and worked very hard.

what statistics? please mention what the statistics is, it may make the readers confuse

OP Abdurasul 32 / 78

May 6, 2014 #4

Ok, I will take into my consideration the next time)

dumi 1 / 6793

May 7, 2014 #5

There is a saying in my language: everybody is gifted, but some people never open their package.

Nice saying :) Good hook to open your essay :)

The majority of people believe that everyone has special talent that suits to the particular sphere of life.

This is not actually what your prompt says -

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.

It talks about born talents vs trained talents. So you need to align your writing accordingly. When you tell your reader about the background of the issue, tell the issue in its original sense. Easiest way to do that is to paraphrase the prompt :)

Pahan 1 / 1824

May 7, 2014 #6

This is not actually what your prompt says -
Abdurasul:
It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not.
It talks about born talents vs trained talents. So you need to align your writing accordingly. When you tell your reader about the background of the issue, tell the issue in its original sense. Easiest way to do that is to paraphrase the prompt :)

I too feel the same way ... I think you are going out of topic. Let's look at this body para;

To begin with, environment often is more important than talent, because it is the primary factor of the formation of everybody's outlook and consciousness. For example, both western and eastern renaissance were at peaceful times, in other words no science can be developed at a war times. In this sense, even though there were talents at that time, environment didn't let them prosper

Well, there is only very little alignment I too can find between the above para and your prompt. You really do not have talk about very advance stuff, but to talk about things that are more relevant to your topic. Also, stay with your prompt always without having your writing deviated from its primary objective.