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IELTS TASK 2 ; Are talents inborn or trained?



eileenalien 8 / 20  
Apr 22, 2013   #1
Hello guys! I am preparing for the IELTS. Looking for your comments! Thanks a lot!

Task 2: It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

"Piano-learning Hot" swept all over China just as soon as Chinese pianist Langlang became well-known all over the world. Parents in China got crazy about taking their children to attend some skills-teaching classes, such as music, art or sport, hoping their kids to become the next Langlang or Yao. However, the question is whether it is so ideal that we can ignore individuals' natutral talent when it comes to being really good in certain feilds.

Numerous people stand for it because there are a lot of successful examples that people became masters of some areas with the help of continued training and duided practice rather than innate talent. Here too, Langlang is such a perfect instance supporting this statement. He admitted that he was not that talented and it was his father's nearly cruel teaching methods and his hard-work that contributed to his success. Besides Langlang, it is easy to figure out plenty of examples as well.

On the other hand,other people declare that once a person was born, his destiny was already decided. That is to say, people will develop according to their talent no matter what was done postnatally. Van Gogh, Bach and many other figures in history can support for this. Although they were not well-educated at their times, they still became masters in their territories.

I personally think that, some people do have talent that are probably inherited via genes. Such talent can give individuals facility for certain skills that allow them to excel. That is something extremely difficult for average people to achieve. But, as with all questions of nature versus nurture, they are not mutually exclusive. Successful people in certain areas have probably succeed because of both continuous training and inborn talent. Without natural talent, training and personal efforts would be neither arractive nor productive, and without the training, people would not know how to exploit and develop their talent.

To conclud, I agree that children can be taught particular skills, however, to be really good at something, then some talent is required.

AidanaMyrzakhan 2 / 1  
Apr 22, 2013   #2
"Piano-learning Hot"swept all over China just as soon as Chinese pianist Langlang became well-known all over the world. Parents in China got crazy about taking their children to attend some skills-teaching classes, such as music, art or sport, hoping their kids to become the next Langlang or Yao. INTRODUCTION IS STRANGE. ADD YOUR CERTAIN POINT OF VIEW.

Although they were not well-educated at their times, they still became masters in their territories. THEY ARE STILL MASTERS OF THEIR OUN SUBJECTS.
To conclude OR to recapitulate , I agree that children can be taught particular skills, however, to be really good at something, then some talent is required. VERY SHORT CONCLUSION, ADD SOMETHING

GOOD LUCK:)
dumi 1 / 6793  
Apr 25, 2013   #3
However, the question is whether it is so ideal that we can ignore individuals' natutral talent when it comes to being really good in certain feilds.

... you give a great start, but there is a drop in your flow here. This line is a bit confusing and does not beautifully convey your idea.

However, the question is that whether it is prudent to ignore one's natural inborn talent, especially in the fields like music or sports.

Numerous people stand for it because there are a lot of successful examples that people became masters of some areas with the help of continued training and duided practice rather than innate talent.

... stand for what? ... There is no clear reference to this from the previous paragraph. There you talk about both sides
andrea94 3 / 9  
Apr 25, 2013   #4
You wrote a good essay, but you have to remember to restate the question and to do it with your own words. In addition, remember to leave at least 5 minutes to check the spelling, because they can take off points for mistakes.
OP eileenalien 8 / 20  
Apr 27, 2013   #5
thank u~ i really appreciate your commentsïź


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