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TED talk: Under water explorer - cave diver


Fadhilahumar91 61 / 73 6  
Aug 16, 2016   #1
Jill Heinerth is an underwater explorer, most specific in cave divers. There are many people imagine that diving in underwater most dangerous and imagine cave in black space. But, it is not true. She is the first cave diver that explored inside the mother earth. She dived into the iceberg, and explored in the ice form live in the ice. Jill said that all the sea world is not solid rock but it smooth like sponge. There some earth life forms and other material that the human needed.

The divers using sophisticated technology about re-breathers and 3D camera. Re-breathers is equipment to recycling and custom mixing exotic life support gases, it can helps to breath, when they dive into mother earth for 21 hours. Also, 3D camera is equipment to making map with 3D model by using high radioactive frequency until the surface. Jill discovered endemic species or animals ancient for biologist research. It is unusual species that can be live without pigment and eyes in some cases. Also they have a long life based on the vassal records in extinction in dinosaurs. It help the biologist to study about evolution and survival life.

In other that, discovering the underwater help the archeologist and paleontologist to preserve cultural history, such as culture remains and human remains. And it helps the physicist to track the global clime. Finally, understand human connection between underwater and all resources in the planet, it helps to making solutions from problem issue in this century.

ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 16, 2016   #2
hallo miss dila,

There are many people imagine that diving in underwater most is dangerous and cave in is a black space.

There some earth life forms and other materials that the humansneeded. need.

The divers usinguse sophisticated technology about re-breathers and 3D camera.

Re-breathers is equipment to recyclingrecycle and custom to mixing exotic life support gases,

it can helpsdivers to breath,

Also, 3D camera is an equipment to makingmake map with 3D model ...

Jill also discovered endemic species or animals ancientancient animals for biologist research.

It is unusual species that can be live without pigment and eyes in some cases.

It helps the biologist to study ...

please pay attention for using verb-agreement properly.
Wolf Larsen - / 127 47  
Aug 16, 2016   #3
Hello Fadhilahumar91

I applied some corrections to your text so that it will sound much more stylistically refined:

most specific [...] Specifically, she specializes in cave diving.
There are Many people [...] believe that diving is dangerous while assuming that it is pitch-dark inside of a cave.
But, it is not true [...] This, however, is not quite the case.
She [...] Jill is the first female diver that was able to explore some deepest caves beneath the earth.
and explored [...] how does the ice form.
Jill said that [...] the bottom of the sea is like a sponge.
There some [...] are many life forms can be found living even in some deepest underwater caves.
The Divers using [...] use...
Re-breather is equipment [...] is a part of the professional equipment for diving. [the rest of the sentence is hardly intelligible... you should probably just remove it. Try to write simpler sentences for now]

tofor making 3D maps by using... until the surface [...] no need for this.
Jill discovered [...] many endemic species, as well as those that used to be considered extinct.
It is unusua l [...] Some of the discovered life forms are eyeless because they dwell in constant darkness.
based on the vassal records in extinction in dinosaurs [...] It is unclear as to what you're trying to say by that.
It help [...] Jill's discoveries should help biologists to gain a better understanding of the laws of evolution.

The last three sentences are hardly understandable, as well. You should probably just say: "Jill's discoveries did contribute rather substantially towards enlightening people on what the underwater world is all about".

I hope it helped. Regards.
Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Aug 16, 2016   #4
here some comment from me
There are many people imagine that diving in underwater most dangerous and imagine cave in black space.
A wide range of people imagine that diving in underwater cave is dangerous.
But , it is not true.avoid use but in the beginning of sentences .
thank you


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