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TEACHING CHILDREN THE LITERATURE THEIR OWN COUNTRY - OTHER COUNTRIES



sumidakanae 1 / -  
Jun 24, 2018   #1
Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?

THE LITERATURE AT SCHOOLS



People think teaching students the literature of their own country will be better instead of other countries. While I accept that students should be encouraged literature works of their own culture, I also believe that studying foreign literature is equally fundamental.

On the one hand, when students are acquired knowledge about their own culture by learning literature in their school, they are likely to enrich their knowledge and broaden their horizons about culture and tradition in their country. For instance, the folktale of the magic crossbow will help locals improve their patriotism and feel take pride in their culture. In addition, That will help to develope children's patriotism. For example, children are able to learn how to the ancestors went through various challenges to defeat invaders in order to protect their country through Thanh Giong folktale. Young generations are likely to know that they have to try to their best with the aim of contributing to develope their country

On the other hand, I reckon that it is necessary for children to teach literature works of other countries that is equally fundamental. Not only can young generations be acquired knowledge of cultural value, but they also are able to know about traditional of each area in the world. In effect, it is not impossible that children will avoid a myriad of issues related to culture shock when they go to abroad, even work with foreign companies. In addition, if the students know traditional as well as historical heritage of their own country and other nations, they are likely to take problem under consideration according to many/various different aspects. That will help them develope better decision-making as well as problem-solving skills

To sum up, for the reasons mentioned above, I personally believe that It is imperative for young generations to acquire knowledge of culture and traditional both their own countries and even foreign.

MEMONSAIF 1 / 2  
Jun 24, 2018   #2
I agree. Because they firstly need to know their identity before knowing about others.
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Jun 25, 2018   #3
Nana, it is evident that you have misunderstood the prompt you were provided for discussion. The prompt instruction is not asking you for a comparison discussion. It is asking for a single opinion discussion based on your agreement or non-agreement with the statement. There is no middle ground in a single opinion essay such as this one. You have to pick one side and defend it. Unless you are allowed to "discuss both points of view" by the original instruction, you should not do so. Let me outline the error in your response below:

Original thesis question: Do you agree or disagree?
Your Response: I also believe that studying foreign literature is equally fundamental.

The question posed in the original thesis is based upon the discussion topic: Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries.

Therefore, the appropriate response in your thesis sentence in this instance would have been:

I do not agree / I disagree with the given statement for several reasons.

You must always respond to the question using the given response parameters in the original prompt / instruction. When you do not do that, you end up straying from the original discussion point. So if you are asked to agree or disagree, then use one of the two keywords to respond in order to remain on track with your discussion. In this instance, you were not being asked what you believe in, you were being asked if you agreed or disagreed with the given statement. I am sure you can see how you strayed from the original topic for discussion based on your mistaken response.

You are not responding to the prompt at all. Instead, you have created your own topic for discussion which will be considered a prompt deviation in an actual setting. Again, this is a single opinion essay discussion. You neither provided a single opinion nor discussed the prompt based on the given instructions.


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