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Teaching foreign languages would be better for primary student than high school student



sfiza 17 / 27  
Oct 2, 2017   #1
SOME EXPERTS BELIEVE THAT IT IS BETTER FOR CHILDREN TO BEGIN LEARNING A FOREIGN LANGUAGE AT PRIMARY SCHOOL RATHER THAN SECONDARY SCHOOL. DO THE ADVANTAGES OF THIS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

young student have more readiness for learning



Teaching foreign languages would be better for primary student than high school student. Although, this issue is controversial, a number of educationalists support considering its advantages. Here in this essay negative and positive effect of the both sides will be discussed.

Students naturally are more receptive at primary grades. Even they need less time in learning any foreign language than high school students, because they learn with no shy and talk freely without any fear of making mistakes. Moreover, they could pick up the pronunciation more easily as they learn it sub-consciously. For those reason, it is commonly believed that new language should be taught at much young age.

However, high school students mainly get opportunity to learn another language, and met expert's trainers at this level. Such type of trainers is mostly unavailable in primary educational institution, so it is not possible to be taught second languages in right way. If primary students are learnt with general teacher, the learning may not match the standard of the language, and not be used for study or career in later life. As a result, younger may be trained poorly because of the lack of expert teacher in primary school that is the main pitfall regarding this issue.

To be conclude, young student have more readiness for learning languages than older. If it is possible to manage special trainer for them, they then will bring maximum efficiency in such skill. Therefore, the result overcomes the all disadvantages in regarding issue.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15347  
Oct 2, 2017   #2
Fiza, the score for this essay will automatically be a 1 because you are not discussing the correct prompt requirement. The essay is asking for comparison of the advantages and disadvantages of the issue. You are discussing the positive and negative effect. This is a clear mistake in your prompt understanding and as such, resulted in the wrong facts of the topic being discussed. I might have been persuaded to score you at least a 2 in this presentation if your actual body of paragraphs showed that you just made a mistake in the prompt paraphrasing and you were still on track with the advantage and disadvantage discussion. Unfortunately, that is not what happened so the score of 1 stands. The correct format for this discussion in the body paragraphs would have been:

Body 1: Disadvantage presentation
Body 2: Advantage 1 presentation
Body 3: Additional supporting evidence (optional)

There are instances when a 4 paragraph presentation is acceptable for the essay. This is one of those instances because a personal opinion was not required. As such, the 4 paragraph presentation covering the paraphrase, bodies of paragraph and conclusion will be the most acceptable format for this type of discussion.

I have one concern regarding the original prompt. I cannot help but think that you did not offer the complete original prompt for our consideration because in this portion:

DO THE ADVANTAGES OF THIS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

My question is "The advantages of what?" There are two opinions presented in the prompt, but the portion that addresses the advantage part is missing. There is no subject in that sentence so there is a lack of clarity in the discussion topic in relation to the instruction.


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