ielts; Teaching foreign languages broaden childrens horizons

Teaching foreign languages is good in the primary school, but some people consider that they must be taught in the secondary school.
What other advantages and disadvantages?

As the world becomes more global , people will be recruited to be more efficient in communication. Early learning languages are somehow solution for a statement that mentioned. Despite the fact, some people believe that the teaching language is acceptable in secondary school.

First of all it is best to start early, because of enthusiasm in child is greater than his elder gender. As a result young members of our society can easily learn new words with mimic of pronouncation. Consequently, they can sing song and learn a little part of poems by heart, and read them to the audience. This means that they would feel confidence as well as develop useful skills.

In addition learning languages help to broaden childrens horizons, by giving information about other nations, their traditions and also their holidays.

We must aknowledge that, not all teachers in primary school are not best, even good qualified. Lack of attention in upbringing child and shortage of experience might have a negative impact.

We should carefully choose teachers that we want our children to studied and lived in their atmosphere.

Task 1
So I am going to pass an IELTS exam after some months, but I don't feel myself confident yet. Please read and give some recommendation to increase the quality of my expression of graph

The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The line graph provides information about changing trends of domestic access in four different technologies in the UK, during the period between 1996 and 2003.
Overall, there was an increase in all of the mentioned number of technologies during the period shown.(or As the graph shows, there was a moderate rise in patterns of technologies, except for mobile phone with an upward trend)

In the beginning of the period, the highest percentage was owned by CD player, which stood at 60%, while the figures of home computer and mobile phone were respectively about 30 and 20 percent. The amount of Internet access was about 10% which is started only in 1998/99.

Access of CD player rose modesty, closely followed by mobile phone. In fact, just over 80% of users had players and slightly smaller percentage used mobile phone. While home computer showed a more steadily rise in comparison with Internet access, and reached peak at just over 50% and it continued domination under Internet access which was standing at 40% in 2002/03

what is your topic?
take some keywords from the task, then use the keywords to arrange your topic

Teaching foreign languages is good in the primary school, but some people consider that they must be taught in the secondary school.
What other advantages and disadvantages?

this is a theme of given topic. above you can see essey for TASK 2, and under that i wrote an example for TASK 1, but unfortunately i couldnt add a relevant graph.

can you give other suggestions?

Well, you gave very good hook, but you also have to give thesis statement(your personal opinion). It is about II task!

First of all it is best to start early, because of enthusiasm in child is greater than his elder gender/later life.

We must aknowledge that, not all teachers in primary schools are not best, even good qualified.

5 or 4 paragraphs?
Well, if you have a question that you don't like at all, then you can write with a 5-paragraph essay. You write one introduction, three bodies, and one conclusion. This can help you write more words, but some students, that I see, put grandiose ideas, by writing too many words. Uppsss.., remember, 40 minutes to finish your essay are a must :D

Look at what Dumi suggests you with the structure (a 4-paragraph essay). With this structure, you are easy to develop your paragraph properly, one content paragraph for advantages, and one for disadvantages. This is good for coherence and cohesion between the sentence-to-paragraph-to-essay construction, and for which in the five-paragraph structure this is weak.

axa thanks for feedback) i will try to be active and i hope you regularly give me your suggestions) thanks for all