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Teaching in group along with specialised education according to abilities


clairpure 2 / 3  
Apr 13, 2014   #1
Some people think that children of different abilities should be educated together. Other people think that it's better to teach the intelligent children separately and with special treatment. What do you think? Use your own ideas of knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

It is commonly known that successful education act as precursor to future career growth. Different approaches and methods of teaching have been applied to develop education system in order to find out the best way to cultivate children. Whereas some believe that children should learning as a group, others advocate that individual specialised education based on personal aptitude might be a better solution.

The degree to which individual education is beneficial to child education can be measured in several ways. Children are likely to show their talents in their early childhood, which is easily spotted by their parents. For instance, strong interests in playing piano or other instruments are usually being found out in some famous musicians' childhood. Customised musical education therefore could be a better education to children rather than wasting time on the other areas. More importantly, children who are learning with interests and aptitude are likely to succeed in the future career as they are highly motivated and being educated in the right direction.

On the other hand, many argue that generalists are important to the development of society, thus general knowledge are needed to each person. Interactions and communications are likely to take place for better knowledge grasping if children are learning together. Due to different abilities owned by individuals, a child who has a better acquisition of knowledge tend to help others who have difficulty in learning. Personalities like being caring and communication skills therefore can be cultivated in this situation.

To conclude, group study along with specialised education according to children's abilities would be a better approach of teaching. Not only could children gain benefits from group study environment, also personal requirements could be met.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 13, 2014   #2
Well, first an admin request - This essay was opened in Essay Term papers forum and we moved it to Writing Feedback which is the most appropriate forum for this essay. Please select the most appropriate forum at the time of opening new threads in the forum :) Also, mention the purpose, e.g. TOEFL, IELTS etc. in the title itself so that we can provide you with more task related feedbacks :)

It is commonly known that successful education act as precursor to future career growth. Different approaches and methods of teaching have been applied to develop education system in order to find out the best way to cultivate children. Whereas some believe that children should learning as a group, others advocate that individual specialised education based on personal aptitude might be a better solution.

It is good if you mentioned what your opinion about that.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Apr 26, 2014   #3
A writer needs to keep in mind that the intro is often what a reader remembers best. Your intro should be the best part of your essay. If you could, state your own opinion in the introduction itself with a statement expressing your opinion very clearly. That helps you take the reader in your desired direction.
niesaysi 16 / 290 85  
Apr 27, 2014   #4
It is commonly known that successful education act as precursor to future career growth.

Grammatically, there is no issue about this sentence. But i see that this needs to be refined to achieve EMPHASIS and DIRECTNESS.
Good education is commonly known as a precursor to future career growth.

Different approaches and methods of teaching have been applied to develop education system in order to find out the best way to cultivate (what is going to cultivate? children.

Whereas some believe that children should learning( should + base form of verb) ...

The degree to which individual education is beneficial to child education can be measured in several ways.

Let us rectify this in terms of sentence structure :)
It can be measured in several ways how beneficial individual education is to children.
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 27, 2014   #5
Whereas some believe that children should learning learn as a group, others advocate that individual specialised education based on personal aptitude might be a better solution.

this may look a small mistake, but you should pay attention as well because i would be your big problem if you leave it

The degree to which individual education is beneficial to child education can be measured in several ways.

I cannot catch your point here, this sentence is confusing


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