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Technological improvement has always two sides, benefits and drawbacks


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Jul 17, 2014   #1
Human have made a great technological process in the last hundred years. However, this progress has negative effects on people's lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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Technology plays a vital role in human lives. Obviously, it simplifies the people in their daily routines. On the other hand, some people view that the drawback followed the technological improvement. I tend to disagree with the former due to several reasons.

Technological improvement followed by several drawbacks. Over using of computer can be effect for the vision impairment and pain in the backbone. The student who becomes active user of computer nowadays results highly number of myopia case in the early age. Surely, it was different while the using of typing machine without radiation screen stance stronger as the main equipment for student using.

However, the advance of technology helps people adversely in their daily living. It can be seen in the field of home living and office working. For instance, Indonesia people over decades spent around hours with several steps to cook rice as their daily intake. It is different nowadays, with the betterment of technology, eatable rice can be served around 45 minutes with just one pressing in the Magic Jar. In any case office using we can see in the public service. Recently, police officer need minutes while reporting robbery custody with the manual typing machine. What about if the case increases, how many times consume just for making report, and how many time the officer need to arrest the criminals? In helping of technological process, such as computer and handy talk, making a report and communicate with become easier and the case can be solved quickly.

Having said that, technological improvement has always two sides, benefits and drawbacks. I tend to disagree that the improvement process of technology damages people especially in their daily lives while tremendous benefit stands more than it's drawback.
devabe2005 46 / 97  
Jul 17, 2014   #2
In helping of technological process, such as computer and handy talk, making a report and communicate with become easier and the case can be solved quickly.

Technological advanced equipment such as computer and handy talk enables easy to make a report and better communication which result in immediate solving of the cases..

I tend to disagree that the improvement process of technology damages people especially in their daily lives while tremendous benefit stands more than it's drawback

I tend to disagree that the affects of technology improvement in daily lives of people while tremendous benefit stands more than it's drawback. .
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jul 18, 2014   #3
Hello SHanafi, I just give a minor evaluation.

However, the advance of technology Newly invented technology helps people adversely in their daily living routine. It can be seen in the field of home living and office working. Long time ago, for instance, Indonesia people over decades Indonesian people spent around many hours with several steps to cook rice as their daily intake. It is different nowadays, with the betterment of technology, eatable rice can be served around 45 minutes with just one pressing in the Magic Jar. In any case, office using we can see in the public service. Recently, police officer needsmore than 10 minutes, while reporting robbery custody useswith the manual typing machine. What about if the case increases, how many times consumespend just for making a report, and how many time the officer need to arrest the criminals?the cops are conducting an investigation into the crime? . In helping of technological process, such as computer and handy talk, making a report and communicate doing communication with become easier, and the case can be solved quickly.

tremendous benefit stands more than it's drawback.

the benefit is outweigh drawback.

Overall, I get the point of view clearly and this writing has well organized.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Jul 20, 2014   #4
Hello SHanafi

Hello tiaDS, thank you..
I saw several mistakes I did after my second reading beside your correction

drawback followed the technological improvement

and

Technological improvement followed by several drawbacks.

Redundant :(
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jul 20, 2014   #5
Some vocabularies and sentences interrupt the flow.
You need a concluding signal. This is strictly necessary, you know.


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