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Teenagers should obtain more life skills which will be useful in the real world - IELTS



Rizkymarchanary 1 / 3  
Feb 22, 2016   #1
some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children).

To what extent do you agree or disagree?


As a part of society, teenagers-students should be involved in unpaid community service as a compulsory part of program in their school. Several colleges have been adopted for adding experience and humanity sense. Honestly, it is become valuable if student work in community service.

Generally, most of schools offer many lectures to increase their skill which connecting in many job field or university majority. Yet, seldom of schools are serving to improve students life skill. Both of lectures skill and life skill are important but forming teenagers personality not as easy as estimated and must be applied as early stage. Teenager students should be introduced with give them opportunities how to communicate with each other in the work or solve some issues together. However, secondary-education student must be understand about responsibility when their be a part of group to finishing some job. For instance, teachers could sending their students probably for a couple months to help citizen which hit disaster. The institution of rescue in that area will be feel helpful and with team work to help each other and raising their social value.

In another hand, crime and another violence usually be occurred by them who using leisure time without unpaid community service. In fact, they fight with other school because lack of value life and how to respect with each other.

In congclusion, teenager behavior is unstable, they require to get more life skill which will useful in the real world when they are become adult people

thaobui1907 2 / 4  
Feb 22, 2016   #2
Honestly, it is become valuable if students work in community service.

I think you should avoid using the same words as what they used.

... skill which connecting in many job fields or university majority. Yet, seldom of schools are is serving to improve students life skill.
Teenager students should be introduced with give by giving them opportunities how to communicate with each other in the work or solve some issues together. (I think this is not a good sentence)

However, secondary-education students must be understand about responsibilities when their be a part of group to finishing some job.


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