... to work
in a part-time job ...
... and joy
which so it will make ... well in at school.
for on the workers, ... stress, depression, and even sadness (sadness<depression).
... part-time job
is does not only provide salary, but also experiences which are ... rewards.
... forward to the real life, ...
... learning those mathematical
ly complicated ...or even remember those events in the history is hardly open ...
I mean (you're writing, not speaking) they have to work
in a part-time ...
To recapitulate, whether having ... could
be a have bright side or a dark side ... arrange it at the right time which means it does not ..., and do does not create ...
- Full of mistakes from grammar to vocab
- You translated word by word from Vietnamese into English, didn't you?
- It's an essay, not a speech.
You should study hard and practice frequently.
Have a good day!
If "!!!" means "I'm angry", I'm so sorry. I'm studying to take Ielts exam and I frequently receive those kinds of feedback.