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IELTS- Television makes the biggest impact on our daily life.



devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 19, 2013   #1
Television has a great impact on our daily life. It helps to get latest information in the entire field. In this essay according to the statement, I will completely agree that television has an enormous affect on our day today life.

Television is an entertainment activity which distracted students from their studies. It influences psychological problem for everyone towards violence and drug abuse. Children are observing films and take it has real life situation and acting as the film personality. People are addicted towards films which results in various family relationship problems. For example, there is report says that most divorcee case based on continuous watching television result in conflict between husband and wife.

On the other hand, nowadays, television contains twenty four hour news channels which update current happenings around the world and helps to gain profound knowledge. Advertisement about new and existing products and their discounts helps people to awareness about the latest product in the markets. It provides various entertainment programs which relaxes mind from the hectic pace of daily activities. Discussion and debate program in the television alleviates to acquire knowledge about various topics. Moreover updated weather forecast helps to be alert on storms and cyclones. For example, Due to updating about latest weather forecast on cyclones helps parents to prevent sending their children to school and also get updating about school holiday for cyclones.

In a nutshell, despite television has some disadvantages, it is very useful for people to gain adequate knowledge and wisdom. People spend limited time on television and concentrate on their activities will is a great informer and knowledge machine to human beings.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 19, 2013   #2
In this essay,aA ccording to the statement, I will completelyfully agree that television has an enormous affecteffect on our day today life.

This sentence has several issues; grammar, punctuation, idea, presentation. This is my suggestion;
I strongly agree with this statement and believe that TV has an enormous effect on our day to day life.

Grammar;
TV affects our daily life / TV has an enormous effect on our daily life

Television is an entertainment activity which distracteddistracts students from their studies.

.... this sentence you have written in past tense which is wrong because this is happening currently too.
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 19, 2013   #3
Hai Dev..

Well organized, nice flow to read.
Keep it up

Tessy
mavischang 1 / 1  
Jan 19, 2013   #4
Hi,it's not television has some disadvantages ,should 'watching television has some disadvantages' instead...
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Jan 19, 2013   #5
Television is an entertainment activity which distracted students from their studies. It influences psychological problem for everyone towards violence and drug abuse.

Television is a major cause for students to be distracted from their studies. It also has a major role to play with the increase of drug use and violence in the world.

You need to work on your grammar and presentation. You have some good points which would interest the reader but you need to present it properly.


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