IELTS Tesk 2 - Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools.

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It has been long discussed whether boys and girls get more benefit at mixed schools or single-gender schools. Some people believe separate schools provide boys or girls more focused resources towards children's education. However, in my point of view, I believe boys or girls who attend mixed schools can absorb much more than going to a separate schools.

First of all, mixed schools have more opportunities for boys and girls to learn how to cooperate with different gender especially on some subjects. Take music class for instance, boys and girls have different tones that were born in natural. A wonderful concert presentation should be combined with both male and female's tones and voices. Besides, on average, boys present better than girls on some subjects like math and science, and girls get higher scores on language and arts. Therefore, in a mixed school, male students can help female students to improve on their study, and female students can also teach male students on those subjects that they are good at.

In addition, school life is a pre-learning place before students graduate and start their working career. People learn how to interact with different gender individuals at a mixed school. Take one of my colleagues as an example, his parents believed a separate school could help him focus on schoolwork so he was sent to separate schools for study until he went to university. However, he found out he didn't know how to talk to girls due to he didn't have any female classmates in the past 10 years.

To sum up, I believe mixed schools can bring more benefits to children's development not only during their life in school but also in their future career.

Jo-an, you did a very good job at summarizing the topic and outline it for discussion. There is only one small mistake in the opening paragraph of your essay. That is, you were not supposed to present your opinion in the last line of the paragraph. That is because you have to expand upon your personal opinion in the discussion within 3-5 sentences. Since the opening discussion is only meant to outline the discussion topics, your last sentence should have merely indicated the opinion discussion instructed in the original prompt. For example, you could have said it in the following manner:

In this essay, I will be discussing the two points of view related to the topic. I will also be presenting my point of view regarding which method of education I feel is best suited for boys and girls.

Now, when you discuss the essay, Make it clear that your essay represents the point of view you will be discussing in the topic sentence at the start. You can say something like, "In consideration of exclusive school education for boys and girls..."and then for the next topic paragraph, start out with; "With regards to co-educational schools..." That way, in the opinion paragraph can state; "Based on these two opinions, I believe that..." This paragraph presentation makes the discussion clearer to the reader and makes it easier to follow.

Under absolutely no circumstances are you to use your personal opinion as a closing paragraph. This will result in a score down for you because you were not able to properly discuss the essay in the instructed manner. Always remember that the task 2 essay needs 5 paragraphs composed of:

1. Opening statement
2. Body paragraph 1
3. Body paragraph 2
4. Additional instructions discussion (personal opinion or point of view)
5. Closing statement

Never deviate from this format. This is how the essay must always be discussed regardless of the instructions. All these parts need to be represented in the essay. Also. make sure that all of your sentences are completely thought out and well presented in the essay. The following sentence does not make sense

Take music class for instance, boys and girls have different tones that were born in natural.

The reader cannot make sense of what you mean by "born in natural". Make sure that you always get your complete thought across. This is a confusing sentence.

Hi joan, I think you shouldnt take a specific person (your friend) as an example. Instead, you could have written something like :" For example, in some cases, parents send their children to single-sex schools in order to emphasize on academic work and minimize the chance of possible distractions, which may result in difficulties in interpersonal communication in a mixed gender environment like universities or work places afterward".