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There were three secondary schools that declined the interest of children



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Sep 29, 2016   #1
The table gives information about the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types during 9 years. Overall, there were three secondary schools that declined the interest of children: Specialist, Grammar, and Voluntary-controlled school and there were ones that were community schools increased from 2000 to 2009.

According to the data, the proportion of specialist schools decreased every period by 1 percent and for grammar in each period was experiencing a decline of 5 percent. Besides that, there was a very significant of proportion decrease was voluntary-controlled school by 8 percent in each period. From three secondary schools were increased although there was a decrease in significant and not.

And then there was one that has increased dramatically, namely community schools rose by 20 percent, which meant a residual interest to this pretty sizable. And additional, it was Initially only 12 percent in 2000 and then 58 percent rising in 2009.

rizaldohabibie 19 / 34  
Sep 29, 2016   #2
Hi,
I have some advice

Voluntary-controlled schooland there were ones that were community schools increased from 2000 to 2009.
>> it is little bit confusing, you should use another sentence

I hope it helps..


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