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IELTS Task 2 - Throwing away things


AnnieLZY 3 / 5 1  
Jul 27, 2017   #1
Prompt: These days many of us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time.
Explain why you think this change has happened.
What are the effects of this change in attitude?

the trend of buying new things instead of repairing old ones



In current days, when something is broken, most people simply throw it away and buy a new one. Decades ago, however, it would be fixed and used for a longer time. There are various reasons for this change, and it seems to me that the effects are largely negative.

In my opinion, this phenomenon is caused by economic and social changes. Firstly, the increase in disposable income over the years has enabled individuals to afford new commodity. Meanwhile, the prices of goods have been dramatically reduced, thanks to scale production and cheaper man-made material such as plastics and nylon. With the availability of relatively inexpensive products, less people would bother to wait for hours or even days to have things repaired, especially in the modern society where the pace of living is incredibly fast.

This change in attitude has produced harmful consequences. On the one hand, a huge amount of waste is generated every day, with a large portion that cannot be reused or recycled. Some of them go to the landfills while others are burnt away, causing soil and air contamination. On the other hand, factories are producing new products at their full capacity to feed the growing need, depleting scarce resources. Waste pollution and resource exploitation might eventually lead us to a deadly environmental crisis.

In summary, it is true that instead of using the repaired old item, most people would rather replace it with a new one. It is determined by economic and social changes, and its threatening effect on the environment should warrant concern.

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Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Jul 27, 2017   #2
Zhiyuan, had you not made a mistake in the paraphrasing presentation of this essay, I would scored you a 7 for it. However, you did not do too bad as the overall score for your work could gain you a maximum score of 6. Remember how I keep telling you and the others never to present your opinion in the opening statement because it cannot be fully discussed there? Well, you made that mistake in this essay, again. That is the reason for the mark down in the TA portion. Your conclusion is good, acceptable, but still short of the 3 sentence requirement. Practice using full stops (periods) in your presentations instead of commas. That will automatically fix that problem. The problem now remains in the way that you present your paraphrasing. Please work on improving that. I believe that once you become conscious of that mistake and work towards never repeating it, you could score as high as a 7 or more in the essay practice tests.


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