Tiltle: What are the positive and negative efects of tourism on a place that you know well?

One place that I love is Ho Chi Minh city. Tourism has brought so many benefits to the city but also it has many negatives. For positives, it helps the city grow economic value and reputation. For example, each year in Ho Chi Minh City welcomes from one million to three millions tourists visit to many famous places such as: The Independence Palace, Notre Dame Cathedral, Nha Rong Harbour.... Then, they enjoy some local cuisines of three major regions and join many activities with kind local people in here. In addition, tourists help local people benefit and busineses are make a lot of money by hotel revenue. So, this many things help Ho Chi Minh City grow a beautiful profit and economic evelopment. On the other hand, it also brings many negatives to the life of local people, animals, and enviroment. For example, in 2024, 60% visitors littered on the streets or many travel location. It increases pollution harming the health some people, animals live in there. In addition, the high room rates during peak season is also a negative side.

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Try to balance your presentation of the positive and the negative aspects. You spent too much time and word count on the introduction that it took away from the proper and balanced discussion presentation that could have been provided. There is plenty of room to develop a proper discussion presentation in this instance. You also neglected to place a space between paragraphs, which made the essay difficult to read and also, hard to keep track of the discussion that you are presenting.