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[IELTS 1] Time Spent in different media by teenagers and US Adults.



ritairianti 3 / 11  
Sep 26, 2014   #1
This is my first writting in here, please help me friends.

The line graph below shows the time spent wit different media by children and teenagers per day. The table below shows the average time spent per day with major media by adults from 2010 to 2013.

summarise the information in both the graph and table by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph present data about teenagers who spend the time with five variant media per-day in hours and the table illustrates about United State Adults who waste the time with plenty of media per-day in minutes over a four year period, from 2010 till 2013.Overall mostly inhabitant watch television as the best choice to spend their time, it shows between line graph and table.

According from the graph, music and audio are quite popular with 3 hours per-day and become the second options to spend the time among teenagers between 18 years old, in contrast with US Adults prefer spend the time approximately 170 minutes each day with internet than audio visual with 89 minutes in 2013.

Print media such as Newspaper and Magazine are less popular than other media. US Adults spend the time with below 45 minutes each day for over four years and teenagers spend their time with read print media just under an hour each day.


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lastsky 3 / 5  
Sep 26, 2014   #2
The line graph present data about teenagers who spend the time with five variant media per-day

The line graph presents data about teenagers who spendspent the time with five variant media per-day

please note singular and plural,past tenses
Anfalia 40 / 46  
Sep 27, 2014   #3
The line graph present data about teenagers who spend the time with five variant media per-day in hours and the table illustrates about United State Adults who waste the time with plenty of media per-day in minutes over a four year period, from 2010 till 2013.Overallmostly inhabitant watch television as the best choice to spend their time, it shows between line graph and table.

rita, if I'm not mistaken,I found some incorrect grammars. Allow me to rewrite your writing;
The line graph presents data about teenagers who spent the time with five variant medias per-day in hours and the table illustrates about United State Adults who wasted the time with plenty of media per-day in minutes over a four-year period, from 2010 till 2013.Overall, mostly inhabitant watch television as the best choice to spend their time, it shows between line graph and table.

overall, your writing is good. Good Luck! :)
OP ritairianti 3 / 11  
Sep 28, 2014   #4
hey guys, i'm totally appreciate every single feedback so much helpful for me.
i will trying hard in the next writing.

thanks in advance. :)


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