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IELTS topic. animal experiments have more disadvantages over their advantages



y0_3mma 19 / 28  
Dec 23, 2012   #1
Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue.

A matter of considerable controversy at present is the issue of whether animal research conducted inside universities, medical schools, pharmaceutical companies has more advantages than disadvantages. Strong arguments exist in support of both sides of this debate, which implies that it is worth examining both points of view before reaching any conclusion. 52

On one side of the argument there are people who argue that the benefits outweigh its disadvantages. Many drugs and treatments that are discovered need to be tested in order to ensure the humans' safety when they use or are exposed to certain substances. As a result, animal research is a 'must' in our modern lives, because even sophisticated computers are unable to model interactions between molecules, cells, tissues, organs, organisms and the environment, making animal research necessary in many areas. For example cats are used in neurological research; if treatments for people's brain or nervous system were directly administrated to people, there is no doubt that the side effects would be countless.113

On the other hand, it is also possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that enormous amounts of money are wasted in the process of animal experimentation. The price increases dramatically if it is taken into consideration the fact that animals must be fed, housed, cared for and treated with drugs or similar substances in order to give a proper response to the drugs that are administrated. In addition, the price of animals themselves must also be factored into the equation. A second point is the torture and pain animals must undergo during researches. A particular good example here is the famous documentary released by Manchester University in 2010, where many vertebrate animals were discovered with eyesight and hearing ability problems or even having body parts missing.130

To conclude, there is evidence both to support and refute the view of animal experimentation. On one hand, it provides realiable results for neurology, development biology or behavioral studies and on the other hand, the price which has to be paid is too great when compared to the results. 49

joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 23, 2012   #2
Hai ...
You have good points..
Some corrections...
universities, medical schools, pharmaceutical companies has ===> universities, medical schools and pharmaceutical companies has...
Many drugs and treatments that are discovered need to be tested===> Many new drugs and treatments are needed to be tested...
As a result...===> long sentence..,(37) unable to model? not clear (.
people's brain===> human brain
side effects would be countless===> side effects would be unfavorable..
The price increases ...===> long sentence..,(40)
it provides realiable results===> it provides reliable results
development biology===>?
the price which has to be paid is too great when===> the price, which has to be paid, is enormous when...
Tessy
dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 23, 2012   #3
Many drugs and treatments that are discovered need to be tested in order to ensure the humans' safety when they use or are exposed to certain substances.

This sentence is a bit too long. That makes the reader tired of remembering every piece of detail you have written. Better avoid writing very long sentences.

Overall, you have written a good essay. It follows good structure; contains very valid points and you have presented your ideas well.
Good Luck!
alphy 3 / 10  
Dec 23, 2012   #4
hai,
you have explained equally both sides , but you are not mentioned , where is your stand


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