[WRITING IELTS TASK 2] Topic Social

Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional and religious festivals; During the festive period, people today just want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is believed that the meaning of traditional and religious festivals has been forgotten, in which people just enjoy themselves. While I understand why some people support this opinion, I still firmly disagree with it.

Advocates of this view may have some arguments. Firstly, the festive periods are considered as leisure time instead of practicing traditions or religious practices. It can be exemplified by the fact that workers who have to work or study almost every day of the year except for national holidays want to enjoy their days off by traveling, sleeping, partying, or shopping. As a result, they may forget to practice religions and traditions. Secondly, traditional practices or religious beliefs themselves are not passed down thoroughly from generation to generation. For this reason, young generations may misunderstand their traditions, thereby spending these festive periods in their way which is considered as enjoying themselves.

Despite the aforementioned valid reasons, I am in total disagreement with this view. I believe that the core meaning of traditions or religions has been maintained and passed down to new generations while unnecessary or unsuitable beliefs and practices would disappear from time to time. Therefore, people nowadays are preserving and developing traditional and religious meanings in a proper, unselfish way. For example, in Tet holiday, Vietnamese adults don't have to make Chung cakes by themselves like their grandparents did in the past; and it is meaningful for them to come back home to gather with their families and wish all the best for each other. This is the way they share happiness with others during the special holiday.

In conclusion, it is understandable that some people think that most people are forgetting traditions and religions and only focusing on their own needs. However, I would still oppose this view.

The first reasoning paragraph will not be accepted by the reviewer. That is because you are contradicting your personal opinion as you previously presented it in the writer's opinion section. Remember that this is a single opinion essay. As such, you will need to use 2 discussion paragraphs to convince the reader tha tyour opinion is correct. When you walk back that statement, the examiner will not only disregard that paragraph, but he will also deduct it from the word count, making your essay come in under the required number of words. This will lead to an under developed reasoning essay, which means you will not get a passing score for this particular writing. You need 2 supporting paragraphs that do not deviate from your opinion to ensure a passing score for this prompt.

You should paraphrase the topic to improve your LR score. Take the introduction for example: People's reveling in entertainment instead of honoring traditional and religious values is an issue of broad interest. While...

Since this is a single opinion essay, you should concentrate in your opinion. You can consider other sides' arguments, but you should provide reasons which rebutting other sides' arguments to contribute to your opinion. For example: People's entertaining instead of esteeming traditional values shows their disrespectful to the ancestors. It also proves their lack of responsibility for preserving and promoting religious values.

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